Short Story 4 - Micro Fiction

Caldwell December 03, 2022 at 19:06 3400 views 486 comments
Hello All,

Here is our December short story time. Below is a list of rules I lifted from the Baden's previous thread, with some modifications:

General Rules

1) Your original entries must be PMed to me.
2) Max two submissions per member.
3) Max 200 words (no exceptions). If your short story goes above this count, it will be cut down to size at the bottom.
4) Must fall under the broad category of short story. No poems or plays.
5) No pornography, trolling, or other obviously inappropriate content.
6) Submissions are to be anonymous.
7) Entries will be posted as discussion OPs and may be commented upon.
8) Comments should focus on stories, not authors, and may be moderated.
9) EDIT: WE NOW HAVE TWO ROUNDS: TWO DEADLINES: DEC 15 AND DEC 31.
We will only accept two submissions per participant.

The above rules are not negotiable. This is a micro fiction exhibition. Our emphasis is on creativity and entertainment.

Thank you for participating and have fun, everyone.

The stories are posted here: Short Story Activity Dec 22

Comments (486)

javi2541997 December 03, 2022 at 19:21 #760544
Reply to Caldwell what is the deadline?
Caldwell December 03, 2022 at 19:23 #760546
Reply to javi2541997 The whole December is the micro fiction month. I'll add it to the OP. Thanks.
javi2541997 December 03, 2022 at 19:26 #760550
Amity December 03, 2022 at 19:26 #760551
Quoting Caldwell
Thank you for participating and have fun, everyone.


:up: :flower:
Jack Cummins December 03, 2022 at 19:58 #760573
Reply to Caldwell
I understood from @the Baden that there was not going to be a short story competition in December, and it was only going to be once a year, in the summer. When I queried the December one he told me this, and said that it had been discussed in 'the shoutbox'.

As there is so much daily discussion there I have not waited through, searching for it. However, now that you have raised the December competition there probably needs to be some clear clarification. If what you are saying about a micro story of 200 words is what is planned I think that may be good because it won't be too much work to read 200 word entries at a busy time, or to write one although it probably requires a certain art to capture a story of 200 words, with the principle of the less summarising more.
Baden December 03, 2022 at 20:11 #760587
Reply to Jack Cummins

Yes, @Caldwell kindly offered to organize this activity just today. And we are all grateful to her for it!
Amity December 03, 2022 at 20:29 #760598
Quoting Jack Cummins
If what you are saying about a micro story of 200 words is what is planned I think that may be good because it won't be too much work to read 200 word entries at a busy time, or to write one although it probably requires a certain art to capture a story of 200 words, with the principle of the less summarising more.


I think it must be an even greater challenge to crop a story to 200 words.
I wonder if that's more or less fun?

Quoting Caldwell
Max 200 words (no exceptions). If your short story goes above this count, it will be cut down to size at the bottom.

This seems a bit harsh.
I wasn't even sure what Micro-fiction entailed.
What to look out for as a reader, never mind writer:

Quoting How to Write Micro-fiction
A micro-fiction piece is a story told in 300 or fewer words. It’s a subset of flash fiction, which limits stories to 1000 words.
A step-by-step to draft a micro-story...


So, how about a leeway of 200 - 300 words?

Baden December 03, 2022 at 20:40 #760600
Reply to Amity

I've made some short fiction of 50-70 words.

E.g.

"The money is in the bookcase. Hiding in plain site. Between the leaves of a Chomsky tome. I thought that would be ironic. An irony that may be lost on a thief. Unless it is my wife, who is an educated exponent of the craft, a student of politics, and absolutely loyal to the last."

It's all up to @Caldwell. Just saying you might be surprised what you could come up with in 200 words.
Amity December 03, 2022 at 20:45 #760602
Quoting The Baden
I've made some short stories of 50-70 words.


I learn something new every day!
https://buildwriting.com/50-word-story-examples/

Quoting The Baden
It's all up to Caldwell. Just saying you might be surprised what you could come up with in 200 words.


Understood. I'll be quiet now :zip:
I lie.
Why not half the previous minimum of 500.
Therefore 250?
200-250.
Just kidding @Caldwell. Good Luck :sparkle:
javi2541997 December 03, 2022 at 20:52 #760605
Quoting Amity
Why not half the previous minimum of 500.
Therefore 250?


Amity, it is not about words but originality. I really think you can write a good story in just 200 words. Having more words available, doesn't mean more chances to write original stories.
Caldwell December 03, 2022 at 20:53 #760606
Quoting Jack Cummins
If what you are saying about a micro story of 200 words is what is planned I think that may be good because it won't be too much work to read 200 word entries at a busy time, or to write one although it probably requires a certain art to capture a story of 200 words, with the principle of the less summarising more.

Yes, this is a good skill to practice -- that's the point of writing in a very limited medium, you start thinking of using this word, not that.

Quoting Amity
I think it must be an even greater challenge to crop a story to 200 words.
I wonder if that's more or less fun?

You will have to switch gears in your brain without blowing a gasket. Fun work.

Amity December 03, 2022 at 20:54 #760607
Quoting javi2541997
Amity, it is not about words but originality


Go for it! :cool:
Caldwell December 03, 2022 at 20:54 #760609
javi2541997 December 03, 2022 at 20:55 #760611
Quoting Amity
Go for it! :cool:


:up: :sparkle:
Amity December 03, 2022 at 20:57 #760614
Quoting Caldwell
You will have to switch gears in your brain without blowing a gasket. Fun work.


I'm not a writer of short story fiction. Not even close to it. I appreciate it but have insufficient imagination.
Looking forward to reading the entries :sparkle:
Caldwell December 03, 2022 at 21:01 #760617
Quoting The Baden
"The money is in the bookcase. Hiding in plain site. Between the leaves of a Chomsky tome. I thought that would be ironic. An irony that may be lost on a thief. Unless it is my wife, who is an educated exponent of the craft, a student of politics, and absolutely loyal to the last."

Nice one!
Hanover December 03, 2022 at 21:15 #760623
Reply to The Baden There's also the Germanesque compound word trick. For example, you can save words by saying compoundwordtrick.

This might be a hint into how to figure out which is the Hanoverstory.
Amity December 03, 2022 at 21:22 #760626
Quoting Hanover
This might be a hint-into-how-to-figure-out which is TheHan-Overstory.


Caldwell's I's will be overpulled-woolnot.
Baden December 03, 2022 at 21:40 #760641
Reply to Caldwell

Thanks. I should do more of those but somehow got distracted by cartoons. :grin:

Reply to Hanover

Shaddupayaface.
Noble Dust December 03, 2022 at 22:07 #760650
Reply to Caldwell

Thanks for organizing this. Sounds fun!
Paine December 03, 2022 at 22:48 #760663
Reply to Caldwell
Cool beans.
hypericin December 03, 2022 at 22:53 #760665
Quoting Amity
I'm not a writer of short story fiction. Not even close to it. I appreciate it but have insufficient imagination.


I think you are a better reader than all of us, so I'm kind of not buying this! My favorite hobbies are things I thought I could never do.
Amity December 04, 2022 at 13:55 #760804
Quoting hypericin
I think you are a better reader than all of us


Well, thanks but I doubt that very much indeed.
I have enough imagination to follow the stories, scenes and characters, but that is down to the quality of the writer more than anything else.

Quoting hypericin
so I'm kind of not buying this!


You don't buy that people can be consumers but not producers?

Quoting hypericin
My favorite hobbies are things I thought I could never do.


What made the difference between the thought and change of heart and action?

Quoting Caldwell
"The money is in the bookcase. Hiding in plain site. Between the leaves of a Chomsky tome. I thought that would be ironic. An irony that may be lost on a thief. Unless it is my wife, who is an educated exponent of the craft, a student of politics, and absolutely loyal to the last."
— The Baden
Nice one!


Why is it a 'nice one'?
What should we be looking for when evaluating micro-fiction?
Any particular characteristics or qualities?
god must be atheist December 04, 2022 at 16:07 #760819
Quoting Baden
Unless it is my wife, who is an educated exponent of the craft, a student of politics, and absolutely loyal to the last.


What does "... absolutely loyal to the last" mean in this fragment? I am not being funny; I am being stupid.

To the last what? There is a reference that is more idiomatic than grammatical. In this arrangement, does the last refer to being a student of politics, i.e. the last in the immediate preceding list of things? If not, then what does it refer to? And how can the reader figure out what the writer intends to communicate,i.e. how can the reader be sure that his interpretation of the referencing is the correct one? Thanks.
god must be atheist December 04, 2022 at 16:11 #760823
Quoting Amity
What should we be looking for when evaluating micro-fiction?


Methinks, anything. If you like it, say what you like about it; if you don't like it, don't say it.

If writers knew what was great to write, AND appealed to readers, there would be no ranking of works. It is an AD ACTA endeavour, not a PRO ACTA one.
god must be atheist December 04, 2022 at 16:13 #760824
I take this micro-fiction call is not for a competition but for a display of creations by members?
god must be atheist December 04, 2022 at 16:16 #760825
Quoting god must be atheist
It is an AD ACTA endeavour, not a PRO ACTA one.


Applies generally to all forms of creative art.
javi2541997 December 04, 2022 at 17:14 #760831
Quoting god must be atheist
I take this micro-fiction call is not for a competition but for a display of creations by members?


I think that's the point. At least, it is how I interpret it because @Caldwell said that we have to practice our skills in a very limited medium.
Baden December 04, 2022 at 17:47 #760838
Reply to god must be atheist

Yes, it's idiomatic. Your question sounds like it came from the bottom of a bottle of gin. No offense.
Jack Cummins December 04, 2022 at 18:42 #760853
Reply to javi2541997
You may be missing the potential of micro-fiction by seeing it as 'limited'. It is a specific art form which probably requires an understanding of minimalism. To appreciate it may be like looking at miniaturist art, or even postage stamps as opposed to the large paintings hanging on gallery walls. Of course, short stories are different from novels as different framings of narrative.

It is hard to know what would happen if 'War and Peace' was re-imagined in the form of micro-fiction. However, I am not suggesting that grandiosity should come into consideration of our attempts . If anything, the format of 200 words may allow for the most humble forms of experimental possibilities, even from some who may not have written any stories since the almost forgotten memories of school days.



javi2541997 December 04, 2022 at 19:15 #760859
Reply to Jack Cummins I didn't deny the potential of a micro-fiction and it wasn't my intention either. I just said that the point of this event is making our mind/imagination works with a limited quantitative rule: only 200 words.
But I never said a short story lacks of quality.

There are different formats to express literature. War and Peace, Don Quixote or Genji Monogatari are long novels because that's how the authors expressed their art. They are good works because of the quality of the stories, it doesn't matter if they have around 800 - 1,500 pages.

In Praise of Shadows by Tanizaki Jun'ichir? only has 80 pages and it is completely a master piece of literature, for example.
180 Proof December 04, 2022 at 19:19 #760861
Quoting javi2541997
In Praise of Shadows by Tanizaki Jun'ichir? only has 80 pages and it is completely a master piece of literature, for example.

:fire: :up:
Caldwell December 04, 2022 at 19:21 #760863
Reply to Noble Dust :up:

Quoting Paine
Cool beans.

:wink:

Quoting Amity
Why is it a 'nice one'?

The Baden provided a good example.

Quoting god must be atheist
I take this micro-fiction call is not for a competition but for a display of creations by members?

Yes. Although each entry will have a poll so readers can express their likes or dislikes.


Hanover December 04, 2022 at 19:22 #760865
Quoting Baden
I've made some short fiction of 50-70 words.


tl;dr
Amity December 04, 2022 at 19:57 #760875
Quoting Caldwell
Why is it a 'nice one'?
— Amity
The Baden provided a good example.


Yeah, I understood your exclamation of approval.
I think you know what I meant by the question.
The full quote:
Quoting Amity
Why is it a 'nice one'?
What should we be looking for when evaluating micro-fiction?
Any particular characteristics or qualities?


So, what made it a good example?

I understand we are not evaluating for the purpose of a competition. Apparently, no votes are to be cast so that a 'winner' can be declared. That's fine.
However, if readers are to make comments/offer feedback of any value, then it might be helpful to understand anything special or unique to micro-fiction, other than being shorter...

If it's just a case of saying "Yay, I like this... :up: " or "Nice!", then of course my questions are not relevant. and can be ignored. I thought I might learn something...so that I could better appreciate the skills.


Caldwell December 04, 2022 at 20:18 #760880
Quoting Amity
So, what made it a good example?

I understand we are not evaluating for the purpose of a competition. Apparently, no votes are to be cast so that a 'winner' can be declared. That's fine.
However, if readers are to make comments/offer feedback of any value, then it might be helpful to understand anything special or unique to micro-fiction, other than being shorter...


Reply to Amity Writing it at 200 words is the same as a full short story feature.
You will have a plot and all the elements found in a structured short story.

I said "nice one" to the Baden's example because of the elements he included in that very short writing: money, Chomsky, thief, the exponent wife and the irony that's holding them altogether. (Although, of course, it should continue on a bit more to truly have a plot).
Amity December 04, 2022 at 20:21 #760881
Reply to Caldwell
Thank you.
180 Proof December 04, 2022 at 21:24 #760897
Reply to Caldwell If I may suggest a change: I think the poll should be positive and encouraging with only these options

• I like it
• It's okay

and leave out "I don't like it" so that those who don't won't have to leave a vote that can serve no constructive purpose. They can, however, give constructive criticism in the comments.

Also, a dedicated subforum like the ones for the other short stories would be helpful so that the micro fictions don't get lost on the main page and are easier to find.

Just my two bits. :smirk:
Caldwell December 04, 2022 at 21:37 #760902
Reply to 180 Proof

Hi Proof, the subforum for the stories has its own place if you go to Symposium and click on the fourth one.

I just let the Baden know about the poll.

Thanks.

Edit: I just cancelled "showing in all discussions". So, you should see it only in the Symposium.
Caldwell December 04, 2022 at 21:41 #760904
Reply to Amity Hint: Chomsky is anti-capitalism. :wink:
Jack Cummins December 04, 2022 at 21:50 #760907
Reply to 180 Proof
Yes, I agree with you about 'I like' or 'I really like' being better than one about not liking, which is more about downvotes. Last time, I just voted for the likes and abstained from a vote for the ones I didn't like because it seemed a bit mean casting a negative one. Then, I had to go back and give the 'Not for me' ones later, when I found out that to not vote for these would skew the votes.

The critical comments may work better for feedback. But there may need to be clarification whether we are meant to vote for them all because if all are voted with only 2 options there may not be any clear winner at all. One other option could be voting for them in order of preference, but it might be complicated to put in place for this time, which is more of a mini competition.
180 Proof December 04, 2022 at 22:07 #760915
Reply to Jack Cummins I believe this micro fiction thing is not a "competition" so much as a creative (maybe philosophy-adjacent) outlet or showcase. Positive and/or constructive feedback to the anonymous authors is possible and, I imagine, welcomed. I think of it as a "writing workshop"; hopefully the discussions generated in the comments will live up to or exceed the quality of the stories on which they're commenting.

Reply to Caldwell :up:
Caldwell December 04, 2022 at 22:10 #760917
Reply to 180 Proof Reply to Jack Cummins
This is not a competition. There will be a poll. So, someone's work will still get the most "liked".
Jack Cummins December 04, 2022 at 22:21 #760919
Reply to 180 Proof Reply to Caldwell
I am all for it being more like a creative writing workshop with a poll rather than competition as such! The feedback is probably important too.
Amity December 04, 2022 at 22:27 #760921
Quoting Caldwell
Edit: I just cancelled "showing in all discussions". So, you should see it only in the Symposium.


I can't remember but wasn't the subforum not also stickied to the top of the front page for the duration? So that people could easily see, read and vote...

Probably not. I'm tired...
Carry on with the good work!
Caldwell December 05, 2022 at 00:47 #760964
Reply to Amity Go to bed.
Amity December 05, 2022 at 08:00 #761065
Quoting Caldwell
Go to bed.


Would it help? :wink:
Advice was received this morning at 06.30hrs. Already gone to bed and slept a little, thank you.
Still tired. But mind a bit more active. Enough to leave a comment on the first micro :party:
Glad to see it appearing on the front page as well as in the subforum.
Hopefully more people will join in the discussion :cool:

BTW, I like the pacing of entries with no deadlines to meet. Any readers need not jump to a swift judgement to tick a box but take time to read carefully and think before commenting.
I was surprised at there being 4 votes already but no comments.
People might change their mind. But can the votes...?
god must be atheist December 05, 2022 at 09:06 #761075
Reply to Baden No offense taken. I have not drank a drop of alcohol since I was 22 years of age. And that was 44 years ago. My question was genuine.
Baden December 05, 2022 at 10:44 #761093
Reply to god must be atheist

I was just ribbing you, really.
god must be atheist December 05, 2022 at 10:47 #761096
Reply to Baden Right. I don't respond well to ribbing, but my response to it may be entertaining enough to others.

I sound like a sourpuss, I know. I never mastered the art of banter, and that puts me in a vulnerable position when ribbing happens.
god must be atheist December 05, 2022 at 10:55 #761098
Oh, Boy! I will be eaten alive once more, I know. Because I have another question on idioms.

What exactly does "It's okay" entail?

Does "it's okay" mean:

1. It's good,
2. it's neutral, or
3. it is (neutral or worse).

This is a nuance in meaning that I am not familiar with. And so are most of the users on this site not, who are immigrants like me. Because of this unfortunate choice of wording of the vote, the poll might be misleading in its truly reflecting opinions, as I (and likely some others as well) do not have a clear understanding of the meaning of this idiom.

I would find it more useful if at least in IMPORTANT issues ambiguity was clearly avoided.
god must be atheist December 05, 2022 at 11:01 #761100
The above post was a complaint, really, in the same vein that I complained on single's sites that they avoided the word "fat" at all costs. Their synonyms were not proper or exact; each could be misunderstood for something different but fat.

I was fat at the time, and I wanted to make it obvious and clear to the readers. My self-describing texts were rejected every time I used the word "fat".

So the philosophy (so to speak) on this non-competition is to make it useful, and probably make it supportive in its criticisms, and therefore we can't have a choice of "I don't like it". But we do have an "it's okay", which probably oppository to "I like", which renders "it's okay" into an "I don't like".

You can't say "fat". You can't say "I don't like". You can only say something that can always be interpreted into something different.

"I don't like" ambiguity to triumph over meaning. In my world ambiguity is not even okay.
javi2541997 December 05, 2022 at 11:14 #761101
Reply to god must be atheist The idiom itself translated into my language means: Está bien. It sounds ambiguous but it is not related to like/not like competitive standards. If you post a short story and you see someone pressed the option "it is okay" it means that he/she has considered your effort and originality. At least, that's how I see it.

In the other hand, the posts would have comments from other users so you would see if it entertained them.
god must be atheist December 05, 2022 at 11:21 #761102
Reply to javi2541997 Your seeing it differently from me, is just one more point of proof that "it's okay" is ambiguous.

I am not opposing the fact that we can't put "I don't like". You misunderstood my post completely. I OPPOSE AMBIGUITY IN WORDING IN IMPORTANT MATTERS.
god must be atheist December 05, 2022 at 11:24 #761103
Quoting javi2541997
The idiom itself translated into my language means: Está bien

In my language Esta bien means nothing.

But if "Esta bien" means "This is good", then it's precisely NOT what "It's okay" means.

You are completely wrong.

And you don't even know it.

That's why I am trying to convince the Power that Be to make it bloody obvious what each choice means. If all users are like you, then "it's okay" will be completely misunderstood, and it renders the data false and useless. And if all users are like me, we'd all be baffled. If all users were native speakers of English, then it would not be a problem.

That said, I am glad you voiced your opinion, because you showed a shining example to the Power that Be that "It's okay" is a poor choice of wording for the vote category.
god must be atheist December 05, 2022 at 11:38 #761107
I could not help but think about this "it's okay" thing. Further thoughts to clarify the problem for native speakers, who can't imagine how "it's okay" can be ambiguous:

Another problem with the expression "okay" is that in different uses it has different meanings. "Esta bien" is the proper translation when one is told, "I have attached the garden hose to the garden faucet" then one may say "okay" or "right" or "well done", in which cases it means "esta bien". But when you ask "how was the soup at King's Palace", then "it was okay" does not mean it was good; it means something like "it was acceptable, but not what I would call exceptional or even just good."

These nuances are not easily separated by immigrant minds. To native speakers there is no ambiguity there, but to immigrants, there is a painful, unnoticed ambiguity that can lead to dire errors in the voting we have at hand.
javi2541997 December 05, 2022 at 13:06 #761122
Quoting god must be atheist
If all users were native speakers of English, then it would not be a problem.


Why is it a problem not being a native speaker? I understand what you say and what the rest of the users post. English derives from latin words so it is not so far from Spanish language. It is clear what Caldwell purposed: just a short story to show our imagination skills. Simple. The ambiguity only exists in your mind. You are not even forced to say this is okay because we are not in a competitive contest.

Quoting god must be atheist
In my language Esta bien means nothing.

But if "Esta bien" means "This is good", then it's precisely NOT what "It's okay" means.


I am curious. What alphabet do you use in your mother tongue? It is interesting that Está bien doesn't mean anything to you.
But you are wrong: está bien doesn't mean "this is good".

This is good = está bueno. The Guinness beer is good = la cerveza Guinness está buena

This is okay = está bien. Autumn weather is okay... = el tiempo otoñal está bien...

Meanwhile good (bueno) refers to a qualitative comment, okay (bien) it is an adverb. To me, it is so different, but I respect that you see it in a different way.
Baden December 05, 2022 at 13:51 #761129
Reply to god must be atheist

We used 'it's ok' before and it worked fine. So, I don't see a problem. And I don't see it as being an obscure, confusing, or particularly ambiguous phrase either. It means what it means in everyday usage where few phrases escape some shade of ambiguity and where such openness of interpretation is often a feature rather than a bug.
Baden December 05, 2022 at 13:52 #761130
Quoting javi2541997
You are not even forced to say this is okay because we are not in a competitive contest.


:up:
Hanover December 05, 2022 at 15:57 #761147
Quoting god must be atheist
These nuances are not easily separated by immigrant minds. To native speakers there is no ambiguity there, but to immigrants, there is a painful, unnoticed ambiguity that can lead to dire errors in the voting we have at hand.


I can sympathize with the difficulty of not fully appreciating a language's meaning to the level of a native speaker, but I'm not really sympathetic to the idea that we've reached a level of ineffability in this particular case. What it appears has occurred is that there might have been some ambiguity at one point as to what "it's ok" meant, but I do think it's now been clarified. That it will happen in other contexts is inevitable, but when that occurs, again we'll try to offer clarification.

The posting guidelines specifically address this issue:

"1) Language matters:

This is an English language forum on an academic topic. Posts should display an acceptable level of English with regard to grammar, punctuation and layout. This goes for both native and non-native speakers (although we're likely to be more sympathetic when judging the writing of the latter)."

So, we'll truly be sympathetic to your point, and we'll do our best to explain where there is confusion, but it does seem like all that could be done has been done in this instance and now the conversation is an academic one regarding the limits a non-native speaker can intuitively comprehend of another's native language.
180 Proof December 05, 2022 at 18:54 #761184
Reply to god must be atheist I suppose "I really enjoyed it" / "I like it" might be more explicit for some than (a more subdued) "I like it" / "It's okay". However, I don't see the point of having an unconstructive option "I don't like it" (or "It sucks!"), especially when you can leave a comment to that effect. Make an effort at least to knock someone else's creative work, and maybe even suggest ways s/he may, in your opinion, improve it. I see no need for us readers to be cunts to the authors.
god must be atheist December 05, 2022 at 23:50 #761232
Quoting god must be atheist
I am not opposing the fact that we can't put "I don't like". You misunderstood my post completely. I OPPOSE AMBIGUITY IN WORDING IN IMPORTANT MATTERS.
12 hours ago


The above was a response to Javi.

Reply to 180 Proof If you read my posts, really, you'd see that I am not against the type of responses available; I am against AMBIGUITY. If you can't see that in my script, then you are blind to reason. Sorry. Which, according to your post, you are.

I never advocated to be cunts to the authors, like you have insinuated there in your post. That's your opinion, but please don't pull me in it, as I have never said anything to support your opinion.
javi2541997 December 06, 2022 at 05:40 #761295
I am enjoying all the short stories published until today. They all are so good and striking. Some members are showing that they have a lot of imagination in them. :sparkle: :flower: :100:
Cuthbert December 06, 2022 at 09:38 #761321
Quoting god must be atheist
painful, unnoticed ambiguity


As people used to say: "Don't look at me in that tone of voice."

Amity December 06, 2022 at 16:15 #761370
Quoting javi2541997
Some members are showing that they have a lot of imagination in them.


Indeed. I hope to read some with a tad less violence in them.
Even something slightly uplifting would do.
If there must be a killing let Miss Marples sort it out... or Angela Lansbury.
Murder mysteries can be fun, no?
Jamal December 06, 2022 at 16:22 #761371
Reply to Amity Ah yes, I believe they call it cosy crime, or cozy mystery.

When it comes to crime I’ll take Raymond Chandler instead, which I guess is cosy in its own way too.
Amity December 06, 2022 at 16:24 #761372
Quoting Jamal
When it comes to crime I’ll take Raymond Chandler instead, which I guess is cosy in its own way too.


I've been enjoying Agatha Christie's Poirot.
But I guess they all have too much of a plot for a short, short story.
What about the case of the Plum Pudding...?
javi2541997 December 06, 2022 at 16:24 #761373
Quoting Amity
Indeed. I hope to read some with a tad less violence in them.
Even something slightly uplifting would do.
If there must be a killing let Miss Marples sort it out... or Angela Lansbury.


:rofl: :100:

Quoting Amity
Murder mysteries can be fun, no?


Yeah, mystery novels are interesting... but I am more dramatic, wait for it :eyes: :sparkle:
Jamal December 06, 2022 at 16:26 #761374
Quoting Amity
Plum Pudding


Murder on the Plum Pudding Express?
Amity December 06, 2022 at 16:27 #761375
Reply to Jamal :lol: You got it!
Baden December 06, 2022 at 16:38 #761377
Quoting Jamal
When it comes to crime I’ll take Raymond Chandler instead, which I guess is cosy in its own way too.


Read the script for 'Double Indemnity' recently. Hell of a story. Chandler cowrote it with Billy Wilder, I think.
Jamal December 06, 2022 at 16:42 #761379
hypericin December 07, 2022 at 01:22 #761529
Does the title count towards the word limit?
hypericin December 07, 2022 at 01:48 #761533
Quoting Amity
You don't buy that people can be consumers but not producers?


They can, but in my experience passionate consumers make the best producers.

Quoting Amity
What made the difference between the thought and change of heart and action?


Drive I guess. I was also a passionate consumer, and I wanted to create, even if it turned out terribly. I play guitar and drums, and started both at late ages (25 and 31). Drums will always be a work in progress, but I still have fun playing.
Caldwell December 07, 2022 at 01:54 #761534
Quoting hypericin
Does the title count towards the word limit?

No, it doesn't.
Caldwell December 07, 2022 at 02:15 #761536
Everyone,

Please, before submission, inspect the spelling and formatting (where you want the break of the line) of your stories as we don't correct these for you.
Amity December 07, 2022 at 13:50 #761619
I'm really enjoying all the submissions; the goody pile keeps on growing.
I can't really keep up and I think there is a danger of giving too much of the story away in my comments. Spoilers.
From now on, I'll keep my comments short. Too much is too much :sparkle:
Jamal December 07, 2022 at 14:03 #761625
Reply to Amity I’ve been enjoying your analyses and wish you’d keep it up, though I realize it’s a big effort and I don’t want to pressure you (much). Anyway, you could take your time. Plus, I’m guessing most of the stories are published already.
Jamal December 07, 2022 at 14:04 #761627
Also I don’t think your comments give too much away. I find them helpful to get into the stories, because I’m sometimes not a very good reader.
Amity December 07, 2022 at 14:15 #761630
Quoting Jamal
Anyway, you could take your time. Plus, I’m guessing most of the stories are published already.


Thanks. I had been thinking at this rate I'm gonna be knackered by the end of the week, never mind the end of December!

Quoting Jamal
Also I don’t think your comments give too much away. I find them helpful to get into the stories, because I’m sometimes not a very good reader.


Again, thanks for letting me know I'm getting the balance right-ish. It helps.
'...sometimes not a very good reader' - ach, awa' an' bile yer heid, man!
Or is that 'sometimes' when you've got a hangover :joke:
Jamal December 07, 2022 at 14:20 #761632
Quoting Amity
Or is that 'sometimes' when you've got a hangover


No, it’s when I’m forcing myself to read the stories of my dastardly adversaries in this competition.

I know I know, it’s not a competition this time. :halo: :pray:
Amity December 07, 2022 at 14:33 #761635
Quoting Jamal
I know I know, it’s not a competition this time


:smile:
It's always a competition. I can see y'all counting the likes and OK's.
I think my fingers are sometimes too quick at the tick box.
It can take a few reads, at least. Also, reading other comments.
Pretty sure I gave someone a mere OK when it shoulda been a me-likee very much.
Never mind. It's all in fun...
javi2541997 December 07, 2022 at 14:37 #761636
Reply to Amity as @Jamal said, I also enjoy reading your comments and analyses. They are important for the short story and (I guess...) the authors appreciate your kind words and the effort you take on it.

keep on it! :up:
Amity December 07, 2022 at 14:48 #761642
Quoting javi2541997
keep on it! :up:


You too! :up:

I know it might look like I'm fishing for compliments but I'm not (much!).
I do appreciate that wee bit of feedback and look forward to the authors' responses.
Whenever that will be...

Tomorrow is another day :sparkle:
Noble Dust December 07, 2022 at 17:10 #761670
When is the deadline again?
javi2541997 December 07, 2022 at 17:51 #761680
Reply to Noble Dust

9) The whole month of December is open for this activity.
hypericin December 07, 2022 at 19:26 #761694
Quoting Amity
I do appreciate that wee bit of feedback and look forward to the authors' responses.
Whenever that will be...


I think I can speak for everyone in saying that we all *LOVE* your detailed, insightful (and yes, charitable!) feedback. I'm itching to respond to the comments, but for that "guess the author" thing.

Quoting Jamal
Plus, I’m guessing most of the stories are published already.

Remember you can submit two entries. I'm working myself up to the 2nd.
Baden December 07, 2022 at 19:34 #761695
Quoting hypericin
Remember you can submit two entries.


Oh, didn't see that bit. Cool.
Amity December 07, 2022 at 20:39 #761699
Quoting hypericin
I'm itching to respond to the comments, but for that "guess the author" thing.


Quoting hypericin
Remember you can submit two entries. I'm working myself up to the 2nd.


Well. I am really not up for double trouble. Not all the way through December.
Perhaps a cut off point for 1st entries can be midway-ish.
Then, we can guess authors and get some feedback.

If some have already entered 2 and wish to 'come out' and join in the discussion, then why can't they do so?

IMO, it's just too long to wait. Interest, such as it is, will fade.

Edit: if authors wish for their stories to be entered into the guessing game before the end of December, then what about invitations being sent out by Caldwell on their behalf. 'Now open for author's feedback/responses, after a guess ?'
Or something...
Amity December 08, 2022 at 02:42 #761755
@Caldwell
If there is a second entry by an author, could you please indicate it as such.
I'd prefer to reply initially to 1st entries of everyone.
Thanks for considering this option.
Caldwell December 08, 2022 at 03:05 #761758
Quoting Amity
It's always a competition.

haha. Our participants are very competitive. :sweat:

Quoting Amity
If there is a second entry by an author, could you please indicate it as such.
I'd prefer to reply initially to 1st entries of everyone.
Thanks for considering this option.

I prefer to have a clean slate for everyone, so I opted not to give any hint that entries are connected by who wrote them.



Amity December 08, 2022 at 03:11 #761759
Quoting Caldwell
I prefer to have a clean slate for everyone, so I opted not to give any hint that entries are connected by who wrote them.


Your preference is duly noted.
In that case, here endeth more detailed comments from me.

It's been fun so far but now it's become a bit of a slog, for me anyway.
Thanks to all.
Caldwell December 08, 2022 at 03:42 #761761
Quoting Amity
It's been fun so far but now it's become a bit of a slog, for me anyway.
I enjoyed reading your comments. Hopefully, you'd continue to do so. Très bonnes analyses.

Amity December 08, 2022 at 03:54 #761762
Reply to Caldwell
Like I said. It's been enjoyable so far.
The authors have sent lovely gifts. I appreciate them all.
Too much, though, for me to unpack. Never mind.

Also it seems that some authors would love to be able to respond sooner.
Interaction with them would make things more interesting...

Thanks for listening and your feedback.
Jamal December 08, 2022 at 04:06 #761765
I’ve submitted two already. Now I’m thinking it would’ve been better if we’d had two rounds, with author reveals and responses in the middle and again at the end of the month.

I suggest we do that anyway, even if it means an author will be able to submit four stories in total by the end of December.
Caldwell December 08, 2022 at 04:15 #761766
Quoting Jamal
I’ve submitted two already. Now I’m thinking it would’ve been better if we’d had two rounds, with author reveals and responses in the middle and again at the end of the month.

Okay, we could have a deadline by the 15th and 31st so we could just show who wrote what?

Quoting Amity
Also it seems that some authors would love to be able to respond sooner.

Okay you got it.

Amity December 08, 2022 at 04:17 #761767
Reply to Jamal Reply to Caldwell
It makes sense, thanks! :up:
Caldwell December 08, 2022 at 04:20 #761768
Everyone,

We have a new deadline -- December 15th.

You'll have a second chance again at the end of December.
Jamal December 08, 2022 at 04:23 #761769
Quoting Caldwell
Okay, we could have a deadline by the 15th and 31st so we could just show who wrote what?


Great! Thanks :up:
javi2541997 December 08, 2022 at 04:41 #761771
Reply to Caldwell Thanks :up:
Jack Cummins December 08, 2022 at 18:01 #761898
The only query which I have about the short stories being on the front page is that they may get lost if there are loads. Last time, with the stories being in almost a hidden thread they may have almost been not noticed at all. However, on this occasion I logged on today and felt that if I don't manage to look daily some may get buried. I will make an effort to look for them but I do wonder if they may have been better separated from the rest of the main threads.

I am not trying to be critical because there is probably no 'perfect' way of integrating them amidst a philosophy site. It may be that those people who are interested will find them, and, at least, with this thread at the top it enables awareness of the short stories, especially as some people may be rather perplexed by short pieces of fiction popping up amidst philosophy theory. This in itself may be interesting because it may challenge the idea of philosophy as dry theories.

Jamal December 08, 2022 at 18:13 #761900
Reply to Jack Cummins When I want to look at them all together I just go to the category, which is in the left hand menu, or under “categories” in the top right menu on mobile.

https://thephilosophyforum.com/categories/42/short-story-activity-dec-22
Jack Cummins December 08, 2022 at 18:24 #761903
Okay, that is useful to know, as I am just looking through the main section, especially not being a techno expert. It is probably good that the stories are in the main threads, especially as they may catch some fairly new forum readers as a pleasant surprise here.
Amity December 08, 2022 at 19:58 #761935
Quoting Caldwell
Everyone,

We have a new deadline -- December 15th.

You'll have a second chance again at the end of December.


I've just noticed that the OP still states:
9) The whole month of December is open for this activity.

For newcomers or people by-passing this post, probably best to edit to reflect the change.
Thanks again for all your hard work.
Indeed, deeply grateful :clap:
Caldwell December 09, 2022 at 01:57 #762026
Quoting Jamal
Great! Thanks :up:

Only two submissions. So, if you've already submitted two before the Dec 15th, the next round (with a deadline of Dec 31th) you don't have any tries left. Sounds cool? :cool:
Caldwell December 09, 2022 at 02:01 #762027
Jamal December 09, 2022 at 02:04 #762028
Quoting Caldwell
Only two submissions. So, if you've already submitted two before the Dec 15th, the next round (with a deadline of Dec 31th) you don't have any tries left. Sounds cool?


:cry:

But I will submit to the rules.
Caldwell December 09, 2022 at 02:07 #762029
Reply to Jamal :sweat: Thank you.
Jack Cummins December 09, 2022 at 02:36 #762036
Reply to Amity
Until reading your post, I was not aware that there was a deadline of 15th December. So, I had been thinking that I had the whole of December to try read and to submit one. I had no idea about rounds, and I don't know whether I will continue participating. That is because I have other pressures and deadlines in front of me.

At one point, I used to spend hours everyday logged into this site but at the moment, I probably only log into the site briefly each day. I thought that the idea of a mini short story workshop was to make it less work and pressure, but as I know that at the moment I have only read 3 of the stories it feels too much to have a immediate deadlines and, without scrolling back this thread, I am not sure if it means all the present stories are going to be closed for voting by 15th or not.

Part of the reason why I am saying this is because I wonder if some others who have got quite a lot going on in their lives may be put off by speedy deadlines and changes introduced from what was decided in the initial outpost. It can be difficult for some if it is necessary to keep following everything constantly. Even though it is nice that stories just pop up it is a bit overwhelming, while last Christmas there were all the bank holidays to find time to read the stories in a leisurely, relaxed way.

Caldwell December 09, 2022 at 02:47 #762039
Reply to Jack Cummins Jack, you can ignore the Dec 15th deadline. It still stands that the activity is open till end of December.
Jack Cummins December 09, 2022 at 02:49 #762041
Reply to Caldwell
That's good because I did wish to take part and having the 'shut down" days was when I was planning to give this more time and focus.
Caldwell December 09, 2022 at 02:51 #762042
Reply to Jack Cummins You're good. :up:
Jamal December 09, 2022 at 02:56 #762047
Reply to Jack Cummins The main reason for the change is just so that authors who submitted their stories early can be revealed and respond to feedback.
Amity December 09, 2022 at 05:15 #762067
Quoting Jack Cummins
Until reading your post, I was not aware that there was a deadline of 15th December. So, I had been thinking that I had the whole of December to try read and to submit one


Hopefully the replies by Caldwell and Jamal have clarified and eased your mind.
Perhaps see 'deadline' as a 'mid-way break' to give breathing space. To sit back and enjoy what the authors have to say.

I too felt/feel under pressure to read and respond. But that was because I kicked up such a fuss about the cancellation. Most grateful that @Caldwell took on the challenge to set up and maintain this new and exciting way to share 'competing' stories. It's a work in progress. I admire the flexibility and willingness to listen, change and adapt when necessary.

I was overwhelmed by the amazing daily gifting and wondered if and when it would let up.
Five a day until the end of December? No way, José !

I totally appreciate all those who have risen to the challenge of micro-fiction.
Looking forward to reading your entry, just whenever. No pressure! :wink:

I'll be adapting too. To prioritise time and energy.
Well, that's the plan. Hah.
Baden December 09, 2022 at 09:57 #762107
Micro-fiction was a great idea because it's so quick to write and read and respond to. @Jack Cummins If you give yourself an hour without distractions and sit down to write with a prompt, I'll bet you'll come up with something decent. I use this: https://thestoryshack.com/tools/writing-prompt-generator/?v=1 to get me going. You can always edit later. Just get something on the page. Anyhow, I don't advise waiting for an idea to come but grabbing it by the neck and dragging it into your writing hand.
Jack Cummins December 09, 2022 at 10:58 #762119
Reply to Baden
I always have thought that protected writing time is important and I try to fit it in. When I am was working I used to try and have a day which I almost set aside for writing and other creative activities. The biggest setback I find is when emails come and the phone starts ringing as if being on-call instantly.Preferably, I like to go out somewhere to find some quiet space, in the spirit of what Julia Cameron describes as 'artist dates', and life post-lockdown sometimes feels more pressured than it was before, but creativity can't be squeezed out of life.
javi2541997 December 09, 2022 at 11:01 #762120
@Baden has expressed a very important issue on short stories: despite all the comments it looks like some readers do not vote. Please, after reading the story, take 1 or 3 seconds of your time to vote. I know we are not in a competitive contest but I personally believe that the author would appreciate it.
In the other hand, Caldwell has opened up a poll for something, anyway...
Baden December 09, 2022 at 11:12 #762125
Reply to Jack Cummins

Phone notifications are a particular curse. I have the luxury of turning almost all of them off. Our phones are essentially attention parasites intent on turning into robotic consumer/workers. I mean that in all seriousness.
Benkei December 09, 2022 at 11:16 #762126
Reply to Baden This is so weird to me. What do you need a writing prompt for? Look out of a window.

I'm in the train right now. I can write about several of the passengers, about what I see outside, how I feel about travelling, the weather, what I'm going to do, etc
Benkei December 09, 2022 at 11:20 #762127
Brainfart:Another contest could be to pair contestants and see what collaborative writing will create.
Baden December 09, 2022 at 11:25 #762128
Quoting Benkei
I'm in the train right now. I can write about several of the passengers, about what I see outside, how I feel about travelling, the weather, what I'm going to do, etc


Yeah, boring. :yawn: My writing prompt is about a psychotic who kidnaps Dutchmen and makes them into clogs. :party: :fire:
Amity December 09, 2022 at 11:27 #762130
Quoting javi2541997
Baden has expressed a very important issue on short stories: despite all the comments it looks like some readers do not vote.


I think that it is unfortunately the case that the number of views/interest in each story is not reflected in votes, even if people don't have the time or inclination to comment. Does it matter?
Will the competition be cancelled next time if this apparent lack of interest continues? Possibly.
It can be disheartening. But I love it and do see it as important. Could we sell it better?

A quick look at the views so far:
1. Moricos - 299
2. Midnight Mouse - 248
3. Lane's Way - 235

It seems that some just aren't interested. Full stop. And resent the stories popping up on the front page. It's not philosophy after all :roll:

It's always been pretty much like that. Voting disappoints. Well, except for the 'winner'!
No reflection on the effort or creativity of the authors. They're all winners in my book :sparkle:
Baden December 09, 2022 at 11:35 #762132
Reply to Amity

I wouldn't put such a negative spin on it. Only members can vote, anyone can view, and the activity has had enough participation to justify it already. I judge it by entries and comments, primarily, and as I said, the fact it's microfiction has made both much easier. I could definitely see this being fine for twice a year. Or having one full short story and one microfiction activity.
Amity December 09, 2022 at 11:38 #762135
Quoting Baden
I wouldn't put such a negative spin on it.

Good to hear :smile:

Quoting Baden
Or having one full short story and one microfiction activity.

Yup :up:

The full story one being as it was - with about 12 stories - or with more time to spend reading and commenting, less pressure?

Jack Cummins December 09, 2022 at 11:49 #762138
Reply to Baden
I really do think that people are being expected to become more and more like robots. What I find recently is that I get 'official' calls from organisations in the evening and weekends, not just Mon-Fri 9-5. I am not someone who is rigid about business times as I used to work unsocial hours, including most Sundays. But, at the end it was getting worse and worse working in healthcare because it was often about mixing day and night shifts in one week. Since lockdown, in England everything has become so digitalised and machine dependent. I like some forms, like this site, which make interaction with people across the world. But, in other ways, people are being replaced by machines and expected to function like machines.

For example, I went into a library recently and I couldn't even find a member of staff. I was actually wishing to ask about a creative writing group and when I did find a staff member he didn't know. I used to really enjoy creative writing groups, which involved prompts. Sometimes, just writing alone in my room feels difficult but it is great that the forum has these threads because it is far more motivating to write with a potential audience, rather than to just keep notebooks inside drawers of papers.
Baden December 09, 2022 at 11:54 #762139
Reply to Jack Cummins

Absolutely. :up:
javi2541997 December 09, 2022 at 12:10 #762142
Quoting Amity
if people don't have the time or inclination to comment. Does it matter?
Will the competition be cancelled next time if this apparent lack of interest continues?


I am agree, Amity. But I was not referring to "all the members" as a group but the ones who are commenting in each thread of the story. I don't want to force the members to vote or read the stories. I know this is to have fun and improve our skills. Nevertheless, I think the author would appreciate a brief feedback. At least, he/she would consider that his/her effort on writing the story was worthy.
Jamal December 09, 2022 at 12:34 #762145
Why do people make such a fuss about this every time? Seems to me it's going well.

Although I've been reading and commenting, I haven't voted. I've only got so much time.

Actually, the real reason I haven't voted for all of them so far is because I haven't decided what to vote.
Baden December 09, 2022 at 13:09 #762151
Reply to Jamal

Yes, I realized after my earlier comment the danger of creating controversy out of thin air. It is going well and was well worth doing. I haven't voted for all the stories either. The ones I'm not sure about I will probably just leave alone.
javi2541997 December 09, 2022 at 13:28 #762154
Reply to Jamal Reply to Baden
My intention was not to create a controversy. So, I am sorry if this turned on it. Short stories is going well and and so it will continue.
Jamal December 09, 2022 at 13:32 #762156
Amity December 09, 2022 at 13:42 #762159
Quoting Jamal
Why do people make such a fuss about this every time? Seems to me it's going well.


It is going well. But remember the initial decision to cancel and the arguments to keep it!
To no avail, at first.

A few reasons given: questionable levels of interest and it being fresher if only once a year are the ones that spring to mind. A poll was even put up, then removed- for God's sake - to gauge levels of input from authors/readers.

Is it any surprise that this concern lingers on, even in the midst of an apparent success?
The votes are still looked at as an indicator of interest and appraisal by some.

Anyway, I'm sick to death talking about it. Glad it all worked out swimmingly :sparkle:
Jamal December 09, 2022 at 13:45 #762162
Quoting Amity
Glad it all worked out swimmingly


:up:
Benkei December 09, 2022 at 15:25 #762181
I've now voted on everything except my own, which is a bitch because I'd like to know how I'm doing.
Jamal December 09, 2022 at 15:26 #762182
Reply to Benkei You can view the votes without voting.
Benkei December 09, 2022 at 15:27 #762184
Reply to Jamal Thanks! Didn't realise that. Learned something new. :-)
Benkei December 09, 2022 at 15:28 #762185
Reply to Baden My superpower is making boring stuff exciting.
Baden December 09, 2022 at 15:55 #762189
Reply to Benkei

Of course. Underneath the currents of the mundane, the earth moves, lava bubbles, and, with time, beautiful islands are born, full of mini-Benkies swinging from the trees. From such evolutions does the greatest of writing spring, the revelation of the magic of everyday life.

I'm partial too. Now, me want banana.
Jack Cummins December 09, 2022 at 16:54 #762201
I just logged on during my bus journey now and it was rather funny seeing so many little stories showing up on the front page. Micro fiction may become the new genre of philosophy.
Benkei December 09, 2022 at 18:34 #762230
Kudos to @Amity @Vera Mont and @javi2541997 for sating a writer's need to be heard. We're all attention grabbing whores. Especially @Baden.
Baden December 09, 2022 at 19:03 #762242
Reply to Benkei

Hehe...
javi2541997 December 09, 2022 at 19:15 #762247
Quoting Benkei
We're all attention grabbing whores.


:rofl:

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Caldwell December 10, 2022 at 03:12 #762438
Quoting Baden
I wouldn't put such a negative spin on it. Only members can vote, anyone can view, and the activity has had enough participation to justify it already. I judge it by entries and comments, primarily, and as I said, the fact it's microfiction has made both much easier. I could definitely see this being fine for twice a year. Or having one full short story and one microfiction activity.

I second that. The participation is going well.

Quoting Benkei
Kudos to Amity @Vera Mont and @javi2541997 for sating a writer's need to be heard. We're all attention grabbing whores. Especially @Baden.

:up: :cool: I love attention-grabbing writers. Thanks to those who feed their egos. Very much appreciated!

Tobias December 10, 2022 at 04:52 #762452
Quoting Amity
It's always been pretty much like that. Voting disappoints. Well, except for the 'winner'!
No reflection on the effort or creativity of the authors. They're all winners in my book :sparkle:


Voting did not always disappoint me... However, the ranking will be skewed when stories are not published at the same time. The interest of some will wane, others will tune in just now... The votes of the members do not reflect a comparison and so on. Best to leave this one uncompetitive methinks...

Thanks for all your time and effort at commenting, it is wonderful to read. Thanks to Caldwell for organising the event.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 09:06 #762471
Reply to Benkei Reply to Caldwell
'Ego-feeding'. How delightfully inspiring.

Fiction, facts and farts
Floor us fairly
And squarely meet
Fear and frailties
With Hope and Wonder

Imploding, exploding
Horizons stretched
Unlocking the horns
Of Thought and Emotion

A Festival of Aphrodisia
Sparkling seduction
Soft strokes
Hard bites
Pleasuring the Senses

Sophia rests her case



Amity December 10, 2022 at 09:18 #762476
Reply to Tobias

"Who are you?"

:smile:
The wonderer returns! Where have you been, my friend?

Quoting Tobias
The interest of some will wane, others will tune in just now... The votes of the members do not reflect a comparison and so on. Best to leave this one uncompetitive methinks...


You raise pertinent points. And we could go on at length twisting and turning. But I'm dizzy enough already and need to get off this soap box.

Quoting Tobias
Thanks for all your time and effort at commenting, it is wonderful to read. Thanks to Caldwell for organising the event.


Yes, Caldwell's decision to volunteer for this has made all the difference in the world.
It has meant a continuation of the creative spirit, now exhibited in all its glory...or something like that!

Thanks for your thanks. I find I am inspired by all the stories, some more than others.
Votes don't and can't capture the qualitative experience; comments do.
It's an exchange of gifts; reciprocal strokes, if you like :wink:

Really good to hear from you :sparkle:


Jack Cummins December 10, 2022 at 11:38 #762495
My only worry about the stories all appearing on the front page individually is they may get lost and buried if there are too many. I just read a couple and when I went to see how many there were some have now gone into the second page. Unfortunately, with the rolling nature of threads when threads go beyond the front page they often fade away in most cases.

I am not suggesting that changes should be made for layout this time at this stage, but with these micro ones having them dotted in between philosophy ones may be a bit complicated. So, when I, and other people, read them it may be important for people to look for ones which are buried. Also, as people are submitting at different stages some will inevitably have more time to get more likes.

This is not meant to be a criticism of what is happening and this is not an 'official competition' and it is all experimental. Anyway, perhaps I should be better spending more time reading the stories rather than thinking and writing about the processes here!
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 11:46 #762496
Reply to Jack Cummins They have their own category, so I don't see the problem.

The only change I can imagine helping is for a link to the category to be included in the pinned OP.

https://thephilosophyforum.com/categories/42/short-story-activity-dec-22
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 11:53 #762497
In case it's not clear to anyone, here is the link to the category on desktop:

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And here it is on mobile, in the top-right pop-up menu:

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Clicking on "Categories" in that menu leads to the categories screen:

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The category is a sub-category of the Symposium, called "Short Story Activity Dec 22".
Jack Cummins December 10, 2022 at 11:58 #762498
Reply to Jamal
Thanks, as I wasn't aware of the link!
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 11:59 #762499
Jack Cummins December 10, 2022 at 12:11 #762502
Reply to Jamal
Yes, it is meant to be enjoyable and it is such freezing weather in England. The summer competition coincided with the hottest ever weather known here and it is if the competition is becoming an antidote for the extremes. However, I am aware that you are used to really cold weather. The best way to enjoy the competition may be to go to bed with a hot water bottle and read in bed! I am going out to buy a hot water bottle...
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 12:14 #762504
Quoting Jack Cummins
The best way to enjoy the competition may be to go to bed with a hot water bottle and read in bed! I am going out to buy a hot water bottle...


This is now the officially approved way to access TPF, at least in colder climates. :up:
Jack Cummins December 10, 2022 at 14:05 #762528
Reply to Jamal
Apart from hot water bottles and strong coffees in bed, as a recommended mode for participarion in TPF, especially the micro fiction threads, mandatory 'pyjama days' may need to be put into place. 1 hour's exercise and regular music breaks are also advised on such days.
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 14:06 #762529
Hanover December 10, 2022 at 16:11 #762549
You guys say pu-jah-mus or pu-jam-mus? To say the latter identifies you as a foreigner. Stranger danger.
Hanover December 10, 2022 at 16:13 #762551
I took up the idea of the water bottle to bed, and now I'm dealing with a preggers water bottle.

Damn the Supreme Court! Where's Roe v. Wade when I need it??!!
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 16:22 #762553
Reply to Hanover I don’t wear them so I never use the word. If I did I’d say /p??d???.m?z/.

[quote=Frank Zappa]
Some people's hot
Some people's cold
Some people's not very
Swift to behold
Some people do it
Some see right through it
Some wear pyjamas
If only they knew it

The pyjama people are boring me to pieces
Feel like I am wasting my time
They all got flannel up 'n down 'em
A little trap-door back aroun' 'em
An' some cozy little footies on their mind
[/quote]
Hanover December 10, 2022 at 16:34 #762556
Reply to Jamal He's says it the way I do, so I welcome him into my mischpacha with open arms.

Jury's out on you. Can't make heads or tails of your phonetic script.
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 16:39 #762559
Reply to Hanover It’s pretty easy to learn the International Phonetic Alphabet, but the way Frank says it is fine with me.
Caldwell December 10, 2022 at 18:29 #762577
Quoting Jamal
The only change I can imagine helping is for a link to the category to be included in the pinned OP.

Please pin. Thanks!
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 18:40 #762582
Reply to Caldwell Okay I’ve added a link to the category to your OP.
Caldwell December 10, 2022 at 18:44 #762583
Everyone,

Below is a list of all who contributed so far. Feel free to play the guessing game:

Andrew4Handel
Baden
Benj96
Benkei
Bitter Crank
Daniel
god must be atheist
Hanover
hypericin
Jamal
javi2541997
Noble Dust
Tobias
ToothyMaw
Varde
Vera Mont

Thank you to our writers! More stories to come.
Caldwell December 10, 2022 at 18:45 #762584
Reply to Jamal Thanks!
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 18:51 #762587
Unfortunately one of the authors has been banned.

javi2541997 December 10, 2022 at 18:53 #762588
Reply to Caldwell A lot of contributors! short story - microfiction is being a success.
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 18:59 #762590
Reply to Caldwell

50% new authors, unless I'm forgetting someone. Impressive! Might explain why I'm having a tough time at the guessing game this time around.
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:03 #762591
These seem almost too obvious to me, but I'll hazard:

Butterflies and Good-byes - @Benkei
The Porn Shop - @Bitter Crank
In the Wake of the Moriscos - @Jamal

@Baden is too slippery; could be several.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:06 #762592
Reply to Noble Dust
Impressive list indeed!
I think I only know 3 for pretty sure.

Benkei the Byebye man (2)
Tobias the Curious case of the Silver Pin (2)

Yes, I agree Moriscos is Jamal's.
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:09 #762593
Quoting Amity
Benkei the Byebye man (2)


Yew wot mate?
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 19:09 #762594
Quoting Noble Dust
Baden is too slippery; could be several


A good-bye buzz, I reckon.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:10 #762595
Reply to Noble Dust
Clue in the word Goodbye.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:11 #762596
Reply to Jamal
Nah. The Buzz is Benkei.
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:11 #762597
Reply to Jamal

That crossed my mind, but the lack of line breaks put me off the scent.
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 19:12 #762598
Hanover: "Sundae, Bloody Sundae" and "The Last Transport", maybe.
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:14 #762599
Quoting Amity
Tobias the Curious case of the Silver Pin (2)


I just read that one and think it's too literal to be Tobias.
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 19:14 #762600
Quoting Amity
Nah. The Buzz is Benkei.


No way.
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:16 #762602
Yeah, Benk is the sci-fi man.
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:16 #762603
Astronauts - @god must be atheist
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:16 #762604
Reply to Noble Dust
Two stories by @Tobias
1. Childsplay
2. The hairpin.

I'd stake my heart on it.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:17 #762605
Reply to Noble Dust
So, we've got:
@Benkei sorted then :up:
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:18 #762606
Reply to Jamal
Yes, way :smile:
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:19 #762607
Reply to Amity

I respectfully refer you to my almost 100% accuracy rating on the last guessing session. :joke:
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:21 #762609
Reply to Noble Dust
At some point can you post the list of stories as you usually do.
With authors pencilled in besides them...
I'm losing track! :chin:
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:21 #762610
Reply to Noble Dust
I noticed. Keep on with the good work! :clap:
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:25 #762616
Reply to Amity

I might, although this time around there's too many new authors for me to guess accurately. I don't really know most of their writing styles, so I won't be much use.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:28 #762617
Reply to Noble Dust
Just do it!!! :joke:
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 19:28 #762618
I'll guess one of the new people. "Wake up, newborns!" by Benj96, just because it's set in a hospital.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:32 #762619
I don't know why but I think Cruelty is by @Vera Mont
It's beautiful but I haven't written a comment yet.
Baden December 10, 2022 at 19:32 #762620
Quoting Jamal
A good-bye buzz, I reckon


Not me, though coincidentally I am at this moment working on a philosophical treatment of it that interprets it from a Lacanian perspective. I'm not sure I know enough Lacan to make that work though.
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:35 #762621
Reply to Baden

My record remains unstained so far.
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 19:35 #762622
Reply to Baden Can't wait to read that.

In that case, "A good-bye buzz" is Vera Mont or Noble Dust.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:35 #762623
Quoting Jamal
Wake up, newborns


I have a weird feeling that is by @Hanover.
I know it's not his usual but...
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:36 #762624
Reply to Jamal
Do you never listen to me?!
@Noble Dust agrees.
Baden December 10, 2022 at 19:37 #762625
Quoting Noble Dust
unstained


The concept of the stain is central to my thesis.

Quoting Jamal
Hanover: "Sundae, Bloody Sundae


But... the person who wrote that story surely has a social conscience?

Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:38 #762626
Reply to Baden
Like you :wink:
or Jamal ?
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 19:38 #762627
Reply to Amity That "A good-bye buzz" is by Benkei? I'm not certain who wrote it but I'm certain it's not Benkei.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:39 #762628
Reply to Jamal
We will see.

Why do you think it's not by Benkei?
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 19:41 #762629
Reply to Amity Different style and stuff.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:43 #762630
Quoting Jamal
Different style


So what ?
That might be to throw you off the scent.
Seems to have worked!
'And stuff' :roll:
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 19:46 #762634
Reply to Amity
Quoting Amity
We will see


:up:
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:47 #762635
Three Shittyass Ghosts by @Baden ?
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:49 #762636
Waiting for the Midnight Mouse - @Noble Dust ?
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:50 #762637
Reply to Amity

Great guess. I second.
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:50 #762638
Reply to Amity

Wait I take that back. Too obvious!
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 19:50 #762639
Quoting Amity
Three Shittyass Ghosts by Baden ?


I thought so too until I saw his comment about it:

*Tips hat* *Replaces it* *Tips it again*


That would be oddly narcissistic behaviour, even for him.
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 19:51 #762640
Quoting Jamal
In that case, "A good-bye buzz" is Vera Mont or Noble Dust.


I'm honored.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 19:54 #762641
Reply to Jamal
:smile:
Then what about @Hanover.

Jamal December 10, 2022 at 19:55 #762642
Quoting Amity
Then what about Hanover


Possibly.
Hanover December 10, 2022 at 19:56 #762643
I know, right? What did I write?

Do I have time for another entry?
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 19:58 #762644
Quoting Hanover
Do I have time for another entry?


You've got till the end of the month.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 20:00 #762646
Reply to Noble Dust
I think @god must be atheist wrote The Last Transport.

What ya think?


Hanover December 10, 2022 at 20:00 #762647
Reply to Jamal Or maybe I've already submitted two entries and I'm asking questions I already know the answer to to lead you astray.

Amity December 10, 2022 at 20:03 #762649
I'll have to print out the list of authors and stories. This is confusing !

Andrew4Handel
Baden
Benj96
Benkei
Bitter Crank
Daniel
god must be atheist
Hanover
hypericin
Jamal
javi2541997
Noble Dust
Tobias
ToothyMaw
Varde
Vera Mont
Amity December 10, 2022 at 20:05 #762650
@Andrew4Handel - 'Awake, newborns!' ??? :chin:
Jamal December 10, 2022 at 20:05 #762651
Reply to Hanover Now I'm befuddled.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 20:17 #762656
No @180 Proof ? Yet...
Amity December 10, 2022 at 20:21 #762658
Quoting Amity
Waiting for the Midnight Mouse - Noble Dust ?


Am I right?
javi2541997 December 10, 2022 at 20:38 #762664
My first guessing... :chin:

In the Wake of the Moriscos - @Jamal
Three Shittyass Ghosts @Hanover
The Last Transport - @Benkei
Premises and Conclusion - @Vera Mont
Sundae, Bloody Sundae - @god must be atheist

Baden December 10, 2022 at 20:42 #762665
Quoting Jamal
That would be oddly narcissistic behaviour, even for him.


:snicker:

Baden December 10, 2022 at 20:44 #762666
Quoting javi2541997
In the Wake of the Moriscos - Jamal


Surely. :up:
Baden December 10, 2022 at 20:47 #762669
@javi2541997 >> Double Helix
BC December 10, 2022 at 20:49 #762670
Reply to Jamal Sundae Bloody Sundae I can see Hanover doing, but old ladies turning into snakes, not so much.

The Last Transport is one of the best, I thought.

I have no idea who wrote what.

javi2541997 December 10, 2022 at 21:04 #762677
The Porn Shop - @Baden :eyes:
Amity December 10, 2022 at 21:07 #762678
Quoting Bitter Crank
The Last Transport is one of the best, I thought.

I have no idea who wrote what.


Bitter Crank, you? Snakey devil!



Baden December 10, 2022 at 21:11 #762681
@Nils Loc >> Three Shittyass Ghosts

Edit: Oh, he's not even on the list. :sad:

Reply to javi2541997

Nope.
Noble Dust December 10, 2022 at 21:17 #762683
Reply to Amity

You are not.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 21:18 #762684
Reply to Noble Dust Damn. I am not playing no more. G'night :yawn:
javi2541997 December 10, 2022 at 21:21 #762686
Quoting Baden
javi2541997 >> Double Helix


Nope! :blush:
Benkei December 10, 2022 at 22:45 #762715
Reply to Noble Dust Haha, I do love my scifi.
Benkei December 10, 2022 at 22:47 #762717
Reply to Jamal I have a style? :snicker:
Benkei December 10, 2022 at 22:49 #762719
Also everybody is wrong on the stories they tried to pin on me.
Vera Mont December 10, 2022 at 22:49 #762720
Isn't it too soon to reveal before all the entries are in?
I don't want anyone to tell me anything yet.
Amity December 10, 2022 at 22:57 #762726
Reply to Vera Mont
I think you are right.
I played along but it is a distraction from recent and new stories to come.
I thought it would start after the date given for the midway break, the 15th I think.

Baden December 10, 2022 at 22:58 #762727
It's all good.
Caldwell December 10, 2022 at 23:45 #762736
Quoting Vera Mont
Isn't it too soon to reveal before all the entries are in?

I only revealed who contributed. We already lost one -- Varde. Too bad. But it's good to applaud those who took the time to write -- sooner rather than later.


Noble Dust December 11, 2022 at 00:04 #762741
I'm personally enjoying the relaxed and slightly chaotic vibe of this non-competition.
Caldwell December 11, 2022 at 00:09 #762744
Quoting Noble Dust
I'm personally enjoying the relaxed and slightly chaotic vibe of this non-competition.

Your compliment is well received by me. :halo:
Noble Dust December 11, 2022 at 00:14 #762747
Reply to Caldwell

It is indeed a compliment to you!
Caldwell December 11, 2022 at 00:22 #762750
Reply to Noble Dust Thank you.
So long as you're enjoying it -- that matters.
Vera Mont December 11, 2022 at 00:33 #762754
Quoting Noble Dust
I'm personally enjoying the relaxed and slightly chaotic vibe of this non-competition.


Me, too. That's why I'm not guessing and not telling.
BC December 11, 2022 at 06:34 #762802
As one scrolls down the list of discussion topics and 200 word story titles, they start bleeding together as equally plausible titles.

Jamal December 11, 2022 at 07:58 #762807
I’ve enjoyed this more than I expected. I’d seen it said many times that micro or flash fiction imposes a discipline on a writer that is useful in developing their craft, and I nodded along while not really believing it. Now I’ve seen the light. I sent my stories in with some imperfections, thinking “ok that’ll do”, even though I’m usually a perfectionist. I felt it didn’t matter as much, but of course, it matters much more. Any clumsy description or contradictory action will be noticed and not forgiven.

Quoting Benkei
Haha, I do love my scifi


Science fiction elitists reject the term “sci-fi”. The proper term, it seems, is “SF”. I’m not sure this can be justified, but I do follow the convention. I think it comes out of SF writers’ and editors’ desire to be seen as literary, and to distinguish themselves from trashy movies (SF can stand for speculative fiction).

Jamal December 11, 2022 at 08:34 #762808
Quoting Bitter Crank
As one scrolls down the list of discussion topics and 200 word story titles, they start bleeding together as equally plausible titles.


“The Ineffable” is a pretty good title, but I’m not sure about “Galen Strawson’s Basic Argument”.
Amity December 11, 2022 at 08:37 #762809
Quoting Jamal
Now I’ve seen the light. I sent my stories in with some imperfections, thinking “ok that’ll do”, even though I’m usually a perfectionist. I felt it didn’t matter as much, but of course, it matters much more. Any clumsy description or contradictory action will be noticed and not forgiven.


Yes. A far better experience than I anticipated; quite overwhelming in both quantity and quality.
It has helped to have 'new' and knowledgeable participants on board with constructive feedback.

For those that say it is easier to read, I don't find that to be true at all. Perhaps some but those with complex or magical ideas or characters, images and senses - well, they take time.
They are puzzles.

Writers have all my respect, just for trying. It's all about learning and sharing as you go.
It has changed the atmosphere in TPF for the better. Lightened and brightened. Thanks.

Quoting Jamal
Any clumsy description or contradictory action will be noticed and not forgiven.


I doubt your stories can ever be described as that. If so, then forgiveness will follow a re-write :wink:

Jamal December 11, 2022 at 08:40 #762811
Quoting Amity
I doubt your stories can ever be described as that. If so, then forgiveness will follow a re-write


Thank you. As it happens I have a rewrite in mind for one of them, though it’s probably jumping the shark.
Amity December 11, 2022 at 08:47 #762814
Quoting Jamal
As it happens I have a rewrite in mind for one of them,


:up: Excellent. Which one was that again? :wink:
'Level' with me?
It can't be Moriscos cos that's pretty much brilliant.
Jamal December 11, 2022 at 08:57 #762816
Amity December 11, 2022 at 09:01 #762819
Reply to Jamal :naughty:
Benkei December 11, 2022 at 09:49 #762839
@Amity to answer your question and to add to the guessing game, yes, I have plugged a ChatGPT story as well.
Amity December 11, 2022 at 13:40 #762873
Quoting Bitter Crank
As one scrolls down the list of discussion topics and 200 word story titles, they start bleeding together as equally plausible titles.


I dare someone to write a story with 'Ukraine Crisis' as title :scream:
Caldwell December 11, 2022 at 18:24 #762924
Quoting Amity
Yes. A far better experience than I anticipated; quite overwhelming in both quantity and quality.
It has helped to have 'new' and knowledgeable participants on board with constructive feedback.

For those that say it is easier to read, I don't find that to be true at all. Perhaps some but those with complex or magical ideas or characters, images and senses - well, they take time.
They are puzzles.

Yes to both you and Jamal's comments. I have a sort of happy realization which I will post when the exhibition ends. The commenters are detectives with wisdom.
Vera Mont December 11, 2022 at 19:05 #762936
Quoting Amity
I dare someone to write a story with 'Ukraine Crisis' as title


Well, I mean, if it's a dare.... But it will have to wait till this round is over.
Daniel December 11, 2022 at 19:07 #762938
Reply to Amity

Quoting Amity
I dare someone to write a story with 'Ukraine Crisis' as title :scream:


They needed to generate more inequality to maintain their power, how would they live without it, eh? No one suspected how they would do it; everyone was distracted, if it wasn't themselves, it was their partner, or it was their kids, or their parents, their possessions, their neighbours, their job, celebrities, their favourite team, or maybe something else. There was always something in their minds; they couldn't see what was going on right in front their eyes. Clever strategy, I must say, sometimes I think they deserve their power. In less than five years, they created enough distraction and division to prevent any attempt to constructive, and collective thought. Don't get me wrong, there were some who were aware of the atrocities occurring all around the globe, and to be fair, most people had an idea of how bad everything was; again, they just had something else to think about, and systematic thought concerning the dynamics of power was almost absent in the people; they strived for comfort, or at least a cheap version of it, you know, things. Those who saw it wanted it or were powerless to do anything about it, at least anything useful, permanent; strength is in the numbers, and there were numbers, but they were all around. Society was chaos. Five years, only five years to fool almost 9 billion people, clever snakes! Fall brought with it even more war, but it wasn't until winter that hell descended upon all of us. They talked of hunger, of housing problems, of race, of sex, of gender, of climate, of misery, of violence, of scarcity, of injustice, of freedom, while waging war, of freedom! Their temerity! But we were just too distracted, too far apart, too ignorant. It's been 25 years now and there's no more Ukraine, no more Russia, no more Europe, no more America, no more Africa, no more Asia, no more continents, no more Earth, no more humanity. Now? Now it is just crisis. Crisis all the time.

DISCLAIMER: THIS IS A WORK OF FICTION.
Vera Mont December 11, 2022 at 19:24 #762941
Oh, it's like that, is it? Fine!!


Ukraine Crisis

Crazy Zelenskyy applied to join NATO and crazy Putin launched a crazy war, and everybody got sucked in. Between sanctions and somebody blowing up pipelines, the price of oil went up and all the taxes on gas, so transport costs went up and the grocery chains used the excuse to jack up prices way beyond their cost increase, which is causing inflation, but my wages didn't go up to cover the difference. So I didn't have enough money for groceries and beer. I think there's still some packs of ramen in the cupboard. Want a beer?
Daniel December 11, 2022 at 19:28 #762942
Reply to Vera Mont

If you are buying?
Jamal December 11, 2022 at 19:28 #762943
@Amity Look what you've done.
Amity December 11, 2022 at 19:52 #762948
Quoting Vera Mont
Well, I mean, if it's a dare.... But it will have to wait till this round is over.


Why?
I want it now!
I want it as an entry so that it pops up on the Front Page.
To confuse and disturb the occupants of the siege of the 'Ukraine Crisis' thread.
Which is as far away from micro as you can imagine.
And keeps on and on; sucking the life out of TPF. (in my opinion)
Not that I've looked in lately.

Amity December 11, 2022 at 19:53 #762949
Reply to Daniel
Is that micro? :chin:
Amity December 11, 2022 at 19:54 #762950
Quoting Jamal
Look what you've done.


What just happened? :scream:
Amity December 11, 2022 at 19:55 #762951
Quoting Vera Mont
Ukraine Crisis

Crazy Zelenskyy applied to join NATO and crazy Putin launched a crazy war, and everybody got sucked in. Between sanctions and somebody blowing up pipelines, the price of oil went up and all the taxes on gas, so transport costs went up and the grocery chains used the excuse to jack up prices way beyond their cost increase, which is causing inflation, but my wages didn't go up to cover the difference. So I didn't have enough money for groceries and beer. I think there's still some packs of ramen in the cupboard. Want a beer?


That'll do nicely. Thank you very much :clap:
If there's more than one entry, they can have numbers attached.
Like in Die Hard.
Amity December 11, 2022 at 19:59 #762952
Quoting Jamal
Look what you've done.


@Bitter Crank started it. Yes, he did!
Vera Mont December 11, 2022 at 20:11 #762954
Quoting Amity
Like in Die Hard.


There's a kiss'o'death!
Amity December 11, 2022 at 20:11 #762955
Quoting Caldwell
I have a sort of happy realization which I will post when the exhibition ends. The commenters are detectives with wisdom.


You know what. You are not alone.
I think that all the puzzle pieces come together generating even more creativity, fiction or otherwise.
You are a genius and you know I must be right :wink:
Amity December 11, 2022 at 20:11 #762956
Quoting Vera Mont
There's a kiss'o'death!


Killing myself laughing :rofl:
BC December 11, 2022 at 21:39 #762972
Quoting Amity
Bitter Crank started it. Yes, he did!


True.
Caldwell December 12, 2022 at 03:07 #763031
Reply to Amity Someone took up the challenge about Ukraine. :grin:
Amity December 12, 2022 at 12:17 #763101
Reply to Caldwell
Fantastico :cool:
Amity December 13, 2022 at 12:17 #763395
What is it about writer/readers that can't get past pernickety points of grammar?
Stuck there in an 'it' ('The hairpin') or a 'usual' ('The Inseparable'). Small details distracting.
Not being able to appreciate the story beyond. Or so it seems...

I'm discouraged by the voting system where a good story is valued as an 'OK'.
I've done it myself in a few uncertain cases... so, apologise forthwith. Forgive me :pray:



Jamal December 13, 2022 at 12:21 #763397
Reply to Amity The choice of words is important, and not easy to ignore especially in the micro format. Pointing out that there are too many "usual"s is constructive feedback, which is what we want from the comments. One of my own stories has been criticized for word choices and I've found that useful.
Amity December 13, 2022 at 12:25 #763400
Quoting Jamal
Pointing out that there are too many "usual"s is constructive feedback, which is what we want from the comments. One of my own stories has been criticized for word choices and I've found that useful.


Understood.
I was looking at it from a different perspective. That of peering at drops of paint and not standing back to appreciate the overall picture. How that might affect votes disproportionally.
All is good :up:
Jamal December 13, 2022 at 12:27 #763402
Reply to Amity I suppose the ideal comment ought to do both. Not that I manage to do that myself.
Amity December 13, 2022 at 12:30 #763404
Reply to Jamal
Yeah, it's difficult. I too am guilty of that. Ignoring other aspects. Imperfect beings, whot?! :smile:
Jamal December 13, 2022 at 12:37 #763408
Quoting Amity
Yeah, it's difficult. I too am guilty of that


Fishing for compliments eh :roll:
Amity December 13, 2022 at 12:51 #763411
Reply to Jamal

You know it :wink:

Nah, I'd rather drink Irn Bru with chips and a deep-fried Mars bar. A slow death :monkey:
Jamal December 13, 2022 at 12:52 #763412
Amity December 13, 2022 at 12:53 #763413
Vera Mont December 13, 2022 at 15:27 #763444
I've been frustrated with the voting system, too. There are a couple of stories I quite liked, but that had some flaw I considered serious enough not to rate the same as the really superb ones. Could we maybe have three classes next time: Great, Needs Work and OK ? From a literary POV, it would be very interesting to see the revisions after feedback.
Vera Mont December 13, 2022 at 15:35 #763445
Quoting Amity
That of peering at drops of paint and not standing back to appreciate the overall picture.


Hah! That's actually happened to me, in an exhibit of paintings by someone who was quite a big noise at the time. One picture had a pale track of imperfectly cleaned dribble all the way down edge. It absolutely ruined the painting. That can happen in a story, too - especially these tiny stories. They have to be put together with the precision of a poem. The wrong word in the wrong place; an awkward construction, overburdened alliteration... it doesn't take much to spoil one.
Amity December 13, 2022 at 15:57 #763451
Quoting Vera Mont
One picture had a pale track of imperfectly cleaned dribble all the way down edge. It absolutely ruined the painting.


Well yes, it would!
I wonder why they allowed it to be exhibited with such an obvious flaw?

I'm laughing now at the memory of my eagle eyes picking out the wrong direction of a brush stroke.
A small thing. I could have ignored it. It was only a wrought iron gate. But it stood out.
I felt this prickle of anxiety. I had to tell the painter who looked at me in disbelief.
I said it ruined his otherwise quality job, so out came his brush with a quick lick and a promise!

Now, I 'get' what you and others are saying.
I'm now too terrified to write...
I come on here and my thoughts dribble out willy-nilly. Sometimes I return to edit.
Other times I let the clunkiness stand, even if it annoys me.

Amity December 13, 2022 at 15:57 #763452
Quoting Vera Mont
Could we maybe have three classes next time: Great, Needs Work and OK ? From a literary POV, it would be very interesting to see the revisions after feedback.


Seconded as to three classes :up:
I think we have only had a few attempts at revision. By @Baden and possibly @Jamal.
Oh, and @Benkei too :chin:
Vera Mont December 13, 2022 at 16:39 #763464
Quoting Amity
I think we have only had a few attempts at revision.


I haven't gone back to reread, assuming that the original submission was a one-chance deal. I'll go back when I have lots of time: Since I don't know which Is whose, I'd have to read them all.
Amity December 13, 2022 at 16:44 #763465
Reply to Vera Mont
Sorry, I meant revisions in the previous contests. I'm not even sure I'm right!
I am sure authors and readers appreciate all your constructive feedback.
I certainly do. Thank you :up:
Vera Mont December 13, 2022 at 16:48 #763468
Well, I always need feedback, even if I sulk at the generous ladeler-out of such constructive criticism. He's used to it, and besides he's by far the better pouter.
Amity December 13, 2022 at 16:52 #763469
Quoting Vera Mont
he's by far the better pouter.


:grin: You have pouting competitions?
We need to see the pics :wink:
Vera Mont December 13, 2022 at 17:21 #763478
Quoting Amity
You have pouting competitions?
We need to see the pics

You're not married?
Benkei December 13, 2022 at 17:25 #763481
Reply to Vera Mont Online personas are single and hot. All of them. I've seen documentaires on pornhub, so I know it's true.
Vera Mont December 13, 2022 at 17:39 #763487
Quoting Benkei
I've seen documentaires on pornhub, so I know it's true.


You got a citation for that claim?

Caldwell December 14, 2022 at 03:01 #763632
Quoting Amity
I'm discouraged by the voting system where a good story is valued as an 'OK'.

You can comment in the thread -- which you've already been doing.

Reply to Amity Quoting Vera Mont
I've been frustrated with the voting system, too. There are a couple of stories I quite liked, but that had some flaw I considered serious enough not to rate the same as the really superb ones. Could we maybe have three classes next time: Great, Needs Work and OK ? From a literary POV, it would be very interesting to see the revisions after feedback.

The voting system works fine because everybody has a chance to comment and say a lot more, i.e. --"It's a masterpiece!" -- in the thread.
The writers are supposed to submit works that they believe are ready to be posted. If a story still needs work, then don't submit it. Work on it some more. Self-editing is a good skill to have.
My opinion.

Edit: I think whatever voting system we have, some ratings don't reflect accurately. I have my own favorites in the line-up, but they're not getting top ratings. :scream:
*sob*

180 Proof December 14, 2022 at 03:26 #763642
Reply to Caldwell :up: :up:
Benkei December 14, 2022 at 06:12 #763655
I'm guessing The Last Transport is @Tobias his drug addled surrealist musings again.
Jamal December 14, 2022 at 08:17 #763676
I thought I could identify @Noble Dust’s writing but I’m having trouble this time. There aren’t any stories about stressed out people in railway stations.
Tobias December 14, 2022 at 08:20 #763677
Quoting Benkei
I'm guessing The Last Transport is Tobias his drug addled surrealist musings again.


You mean to say it is part of my my highly evocative, path breaking oeuvre of magical realist urban fiction?

I would not misspell ménage à trois...
Benkei December 14, 2022 at 08:32 #763686
Reply to Tobias When you're sober that would be true but you've been hitting the Bigwigs and Pygmyworths a lot lately.
Tobias December 14, 2022 at 08:40 #763690
When I am sober I spell 'ménage à trois' correctly... when I am not I indulge in it...
Amity December 14, 2022 at 08:49 #763695
Quoting Benkei
I'm guessing The Last Transport is Tobias his drug addled surrealist musings again.


You cannot be serious!
It's the work of the Cranky One, not so sweet.
Benj96 December 14, 2022 at 08:59 #763699
Quoting Bitter Crank
As one scrolls down the list of discussion topics and 200 word story titles, they start bleeding together as equally plausible titles.


Haha interesting that.
180 Proof December 14, 2022 at 09:03 #763701
Quoting Tobias
When I am sober I spell 'ménage à trois' correctly... when I am not I indulge in it...

MY FUCKING HERO! :lol: :party:
Tobias December 14, 2022 at 09:09 #763704
:joke:
Benj96 December 14, 2022 at 09:11 #763705
Reply to Jamal haha good rational but nope. Wasn't me that wrote "Awake Newborns! "
Jamal December 14, 2022 at 09:15 #763707
Quoting Amity
It's the work of the Cranky One, not so sweet


Definitely not. BC is too much of a Methodist to indulge in such whimsy.
Amity December 14, 2022 at 09:17 #763709
Reply to Jamal
Oh whatever. I only have a 0.01% success rate anyway.

Still working on the damned 'Double Helix' story.
Guys, come on help out, please :pray:
Benkei December 14, 2022 at 09:26 #763712
Amity December 14, 2022 at 12:12 #763756
Thought I'd post this here. To acknowledge the work done by each and every author.

It's hard work but I want to give some acknowledgement to each author.
— Benj96

I know. I feel the same. Especially to those who have been kinda left behind. The attention is now being turned to guessing the author, again. The midway break is tomorrow.
Each entry is of value. I haven't given the same attention to each one.
The other day I was extremely tired. In fact, I think I only left a one-word response. And not much more to some others. Nevertheless, I did the best I could. That single word was heartfelt and true.

The authors appreciate the feedback. Not all are 'attention-seeking' needing their egos to be fed.
No matter what some might ('jokingly') say.
But still, the self and esteem are very much in play, despite it not being a 'contest'.

Well done to all! :sparkle:
Jamal December 14, 2022 at 12:16 #763760
Quoting Amity
Not all are 'attention-seeking' needing their egos to be fed.


Perish the thought. :blush:
Benkei December 14, 2022 at 12:45 #763770
I love how I'm ignoring the entire forum in favour of the short stories. Goes to show how useless philosophy really is when fiction grabs me by the short-and-curlies and doesn't let go.
Michael December 14, 2022 at 12:47 #763771
Quoting Benkei
Goes to show how useless philosophy really is when fiction grabs me by the short-and-curlies and doesn't let go.


But philosophy is fiction.
Amity December 14, 2022 at 12:48 #763772
Quoting Benkei
I love how I'm ignoring the entire forum in favour of the short stories.


Me too.
It's a breath of fresh air. Opening a window to let the claustrophobic stuffiness out.
It provokes creative thought and analysis just as much as the big philosophy questions.
Maybe more so...
Amity December 14, 2022 at 13:57 #763787
I'd like to add this:

In response to @javi2541997's previous post and to any others who feel the same.
Even though I disagreed with him re his evaluation of 'Ukraine Crisis', he made some pertinent points, I've underlined:

The negative view is only in my mind, Amity. When I published my short story I didn't expect good comments but at least some members take part on it. That's what makes me happy... I mean people debating about the story and taking some notes to improve the next time rather than say "excellent" "the only one I read" as a previous user said (disrespecting the other stories).

But again, it is just my view and perspective. I understood this was not a competitive contest but a praxis to show our imagination skills.


I understand @javi2541997's and any other author's disappointment if entries have received little to no
feedback.
I can only reiterate:

Quoting Amity
Each entry is of value. I haven't given the same attention to each one.
The other day I was extremely tired. In fact, I think I only left a one-word response. And not much more to some others. Nevertheless, I did the best I could. That single word was heartfelt and true.


We all do what we can to make this an enjoyable and constructive experience.
You have led the way in so many discussions :up:
Unfortunately, it's not always possible to make authors 'happy' in the way you expect.
I hope that any negativity felt is soon dispelled.

To all:
The mere fact that people enter this exhibition/contest is what makes it so wonderful.
The creativity of the stories provokes thought, sometimes not visible. But much appreciated.
You might never know but, please, still feel happy in your creation and the sharing of it.
By submitting an entry, you've done more than some, including myself.
Thank you :sparkle:

Edit: @javi2541997 - that is why I said that the more readers attracted to the short-story competition the better. There is a greater chance of entries being read and appreciated.
Noble Dust December 14, 2022 at 16:20 #763826
Reply to Jamal

:naughty:

I'll add @Jamal as the Hairpin to my list.
Amity December 14, 2022 at 16:31 #763831
Reply to Noble Dust
Told you already. It's @Tobias.
Tobias December 14, 2022 at 16:53 #763846
Quoting Jamal
Perish the thought. :blush:


second that! :wink:
Amity December 14, 2022 at 16:59 #763849
Reply to Tobias
You guys are SO needy :razz:
Tobias December 14, 2022 at 17:00 #763851
And yet, it is still far, far worse than you just fathomed...
Tobias December 14, 2022 at 17:02 #763853
I note down Benkei for the Double Helix by the way....
Amity December 14, 2022 at 17:12 #763857
Quoting Tobias
And yet, it is still far, far worse than you [s]just[/s] fathomed...


No doubt :smile:
ToothyMaw December 14, 2022 at 22:05 #763976
I think "Is this a Turing Test?" is perhaps the most misunderstood story submitted yet.

It is flawlessly written, but it's a little weird considering someone took the time to write us a potential Turing test - for whatever reason.
Olivier5 December 14, 2022 at 22:55 #763989
Quoting ToothyMaw
it's a little weird considering someone took the time to write us a potential Turing test


Wait... You mean a human author trying to pass for a machine? That's an inverted Turing test.
Caldwell December 15, 2022 at 03:24 #764024
Everyone,

We are going to close the first half of the micro story submission on the 15th, and the writers will have a chance to discuss their stories in the ongoing threads.
Second half of the month will open for the next round.

@Jamal, 'just wondering, you suggested allowing additional submissions for the next round. I guess we can do that -- 3 submissions per contributor? If the writers are up for it, it's fine.
Jamal December 15, 2022 at 06:28 #764041
Jamal December 15, 2022 at 08:41 #764048
So, the time is upon us. Shall we expose ourselves?
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 08:48 #764049
Reply to Jamal Is there going to be a "winner"? If so, I'd rather not reveal myself since half of the forum hates me and it will affect voting. :rofl:
Jamal December 15, 2022 at 08:50 #764050
Reply to Benkei That’s a reasonable concern. I’m not sure how it’s going to work. I guess it’s best to wait for the boss to get back.
Michael December 15, 2022 at 09:13 #764051
Quoting Benkei
Is there going to be a "winner"?


I'll do it :up:
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 09:59 #764056
Quoting Michael
I'll do it :up:


That's great. Can you expound on what that means? Do we get an interim winner now? Or are we waiting until the end of the month (or 22nd)?
Amity December 15, 2022 at 10:37 #764059
Quoting Caldwell
We are going to close the first half of the micro story submission on the 15th, and the writers will have a chance to discuss their stories in the ongoing threads.
Second half of the month will open for the next round.

@Jamal, 'just wondering, you suggested allowing additional submissions for the next round. I guess we can do that -- 3 submissions per contributor? If the writers are up for it, it's fine.


Good to guess, reveal and discuss all entries up to the 15th.
The votes can be counted; a 'winner' revealed.

The second half can be for pleasure alone.
It's not just about the writers but the readers/interpreters.
Speaking for myself, I've done enough. I've enjoyed so far... but sometimes less is more.
I will read 2nd half but am unwilling to put in the same amount of effort.
For this next round, I think there should be no votes and no winners.

Just my thoughts...
As always, the final decision is yours. Best wishes, whatever :sparkle:





Tobias December 15, 2022 at 10:43 #764060
Quoting Benkei
?Jamal Is there going to be a "winner"? If so, I'd rather not reveal myself since half of the forum hates me and it will affect voting. :rofl:


Isn't it @Caldwell's call to indicate whether there will be a winner or not? I do not mind either way...
Michael December 15, 2022 at 10:51 #764062
Quoting Benkei
That's great. Can you expound on what that means?


It means I volunteer to be the winner.
Amity December 15, 2022 at 11:08 #764066
Quoting Caldwell
Second half of the month will open for the next round.


When is the second round starting? On the same day, the 15th?
How much time is being allowed/allocated for guessing [s]and feedback[/s]?
[Edit: I note writers can discuss their stories in the 'ongoing threads'. Fair enough]

We have 30 entries. THIRTY!! (at time of writing). I've reached my limit.

Is there an updated list of authors?
At the last count, there were 16:

Andrew4Handel
Baden
Benj96
Benkei
Bitter Crank
Daniel
god must be atheist
Hanover
hypericin
Jamal
javi2541997
Noble Dust
Tobias
ToothyMaw
Varde
Vera Mont

Benkei December 15, 2022 at 13:18 #764081
Reply to Amity ChatGPT is another author
Amity December 15, 2022 at 13:20 #764083
Quoting Benkei
ChatGPT is another author


Abstract Conspiracy?
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 13:21 #764084
Reply to Amity Nope. Why did you think that?
Amity December 15, 2022 at 13:22 #764085
Reply to Benkei

Quoting Benkei
Why did you think that?

See Story Discussion.

Not 'Is this a Turing Test'?!
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 13:24 #764086
Reply to Amity Nope. A caveat though, it could be other people submitted an AI generated story, I only know about the one that I submitted.
Amity December 15, 2022 at 13:24 #764087
Reply to Benkei
Double Helix.
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 13:25 #764088
Reply to Amity Now you're grossly overestimating the capabilities of an AI.
Amity December 15, 2022 at 13:26 #764091
[s]Premises and Conclusion.[/s]
Amity December 15, 2022 at 13:28 #764094
Derivative. Yes?
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 13:29 #764095
Reply to Amity Yes, it's Derivative. I tried to force it to include dialogue but that only made it worse. :rofl:

EDIT: Absolutely loved @ToothyMaw's comment on it.
Amity December 15, 2022 at 13:30 #764096
Reply to Benkei
Yay. Funnily enough that was the only one that received a single-word response from me.
'Hilarious' !
Congratulations :fire:
Amity December 15, 2022 at 13:33 #764099
Quoting Benkei
Now you're grossly overestimating the capabilities of an AI.


:rofl: Did you write it? Double Helix?
Amity December 15, 2022 at 13:37 #764101
I think 'Is this a Turing Test?' is by @Jack Cummins.
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 13:41 #764103
Reply to Amity My thought as well.
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 13:41 #764104
Reply to Amity I've extensively analysed it, so no, it's not mine.
Amity December 15, 2022 at 13:42 #764105
Reply to Benkei
:up: I think it's by @Vera Mont... maybe not...
I think she is author of 'Cruelty'.

I'm giving it a rest now.
My guesses are usually way off.
But I know 'The hairpin' is by @Tobias. For sure.

We need a list of both authors and stories. Side by side. To tick off as we go.
Where is @Noble Dust when you need him...?
Amity December 15, 2022 at 13:58 #764112
I'm going to take a chance.
Even though @180 Proof isn't on the previous list.
I think he wrote: 'The Inseparable'...
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 14:00 #764113
  • Derivative by ChatGPT
  • Is this a Turing test? by
  • Cruelty by
  • Death by Chocolate by
  • The Last One by
  • Three Shittyass Ghosts by
  • How I met your mother by
  • Double Helix by
  • Childsplay by
  • In the Wake of the Moriscos by
  • Rage by
  • Abstract Conspiracy by
  • Premises and Conclusion by
  • A Dead Letter by
  • A good-bye buzz. by
  • The Last Transport by
  • Astronauts by
  • Wake up, newborns! by
  • Butterflies and Good-byes by
  • Lane's Way by
  • Waiting for the Midnight Mouse by
  • Sundae, Bloody Sundae by
  • The Hairpin by
  • Ukraine crisis by
  • The Inseperable by
  • Blood and gore and guts and veins in my teeth. by
  • Drive, He Said. by
  • Escape in Autumn by
  • The Porn Shop by
  • Level by
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 14:04 #764115
The Porn Shop by Tobias because he's always going on about sex and gender relations in philosophy.
ToothyMaw December 15, 2022 at 14:05 #764116
Reply to Olivier5

No, I mean that the test is for a machine or human reading the story. The story seems to intend to expose a machine i.e., a machine that can identify with machines would likely interpret the story differently from a human.

Or the writer was an AI, and it is attempting to pass for a human. Or maybe it is an inverted Turing test.

Those are my theories.

When the writer is revealed maybe we can get some closure.
ToothyMaw December 15, 2022 at 14:12 #764121
Hypericin for Is this a Turing test.
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 14:18 #764122
@Caldwell can you provide an overview of all the authors? I can add it to the list. Are we scoring the stories? 2 for I liked it 1 for it's ok and then divided by number of votes? Or no scoring until the end of the month? If the latter, I'm going to stop guessing authors again.
Amity December 15, 2022 at 14:27 #764125
Quoting Benkei
If the latter, I'm going to stop guessing authors again.


Yes. That's why I suggested the second part be for fun only; no votes.
Mid-way break for guessing, discussing, votes then counted.
I can't see how it works otherwise :chin:
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 14:29 #764127
Reply to Amity I think it's a good suggestion but I don't want to force anything on Caldwell who's running this gig.
Amity December 15, 2022 at 14:32 #764128
Reply to Benkei :up:
It just makes more sense to me...
@Caldwell has always been open to suggestions :sparkle:
We don't all think the same way...thankfully.

Perhaps votes can continue. Accumulatively...until the end?
A midway winner and a final one?
Whatever *shrugs*

Or...
A re-set of votes for the second round. Hmmm....
I bet @Caldwell has this all worked out already. We need to chill :cool:
Jack Cummins December 15, 2022 at 14:33 #764129
Reply to Benkei
Can't we wait until the end of the month to score to give more time for people to read. I am wanting to read them and type mine onto the site but I have not done so because I am looking for somewhere to live.

I can't believe that everyone else on the site is free to read everything straightaway, especially as there are so many entries. Surely, some of this can wait until there is the time between Christmas and new year which is like the dead time, when everything is closed down.
Tobias December 15, 2022 at 14:41 #764130
Quoting Benkei
The Porn Shop by Tobias because he's always going on about sex and gender relations in philosophy.


My guess for the pornshop would be Bitter Crank. And yes, sex is an extremely important subject.
Benkei December 15, 2022 at 14:44 #764131
Reply to Tobias Not really but maybe I'm just getting old.
Tobias December 15, 2022 at 14:47 #764133
You get teary eyed when it comes to allegories and symbols, but it is the flesh that is absolute Benkei.
Noble Dust December 15, 2022 at 18:39 #764172
Reply to Amity

Sorry Amity, life suddenly got crazy this past week. I have the next two days off though; I'll try to get back into the festivities.
Amity December 15, 2022 at 18:44 #764174
Quoting Noble Dust
Sorry Amity, life suddenly got crazy this past week


Sorry to hear that. Hope things settle down and you can relax.
No need for TPF festivities. At all. Be well.
Take care :pray:
Benj96 December 15, 2022 at 19:18 #764182
It's times like this that I wish I knew better the individual stylings and character of the other contributors. I know some, perhaps four or five people, reasonably well, through previous interactions.

Regardless, it leaves me somewhat flailing in the challenge to attribute X microfiction to Y author, to my abject frustration.

I believe I'm not alone in that sentiment. But I relish the moment when all is revealed.

For what its worth, I love to comeradery. There is great sportsmanship here. Its very nice to see.

I think I will learn a lot about others through this exercise and believe the deeper understanding of one another will only serve to better future philosophizing to come.

I thank those that offered their self expression in these stories, as well as those that facilitated/ co-ordinated the endeavour.

Thanks to all who participated.

It's my understanding that a third story may be permitted in the second half of the month long comp. If so, I look forward to conjuring up a new microfiction for your analysis.

I suspect that the great revealing of who wrote what will not only hone my guessing skills for the second round but will make it ever harder for me to conceal my own identity as an author.

Fun and games indeed.
Jamal December 15, 2022 at 19:35 #764185
Reply to Benj96 Nicely put.

Quoting Benj96
I suspect that the revelation of who wrote what will not only hone my guessing skills for the second round but will make it ever harder for me to conceal my own identity as an author.


I’ve participated in a few of the short story competitions, once as an author and twice just as a reader. This time, I thought my experience would allow me to easily identify a few of the authors, but I’ve actually found it difficult. Their skills are more diverse than I thought.

As a confirmed attention-seeker and egomaniac, I’m eager for the authors to be revealed so I can start droning on about my own stories.

I’m also looking forward to submitting another story. I’ve got one in the pipeline.

Otherwise, I’ve been very impressed by the quality of the commentary. You and others have been doing a great job, making me feel better about my own lackadaisicality in that regard.
Benj96 December 15, 2022 at 19:56 #764193
Quoting Jamal
As a confirmed attention-seeker and egomaniac, I’m eager for the authors to be revealed so I can start droning on about my own stories.


You and I are much the same in that regard. I itch to converse about my writings out of a certain sense of pride and desire to pick the brains of my commentators and learn more about myself through their commentary.

Quoting Jamal
I’m also looking forward to submitting another story. I’ve got one in the pipeline.


Well Jamal, I look forward to reading it! The truth through and through. I haven't been so productive as to have any such pipeline in the works but I'm cautiously anticipating a burst of future creativity and inspiration to lead me to produce something.

Quoting Jamal
Otherwise, I’ve been very impressed by the quality of the commentary. You and others have been doing a great job, making me feel better about my own lackadaisicality in that regard.


Yes agreed. It's exciting. There's a certain thrill about having ones work analysed and appreciated and picked apart. Interpreted. I for one have been enlightened greatly by the level of insight applied to my microfictions.

Knowing this I think it only prudent to do my best to offer the same in return. Every submission is owed due consideration. Though taxing, I know my contributions will tickle the fancy of whoever wrote the piece and offer them the same credence they hae patiently given me.
Jamal December 15, 2022 at 20:01 #764197
Quoting Benj96
Knowing this I think it only prudent to do my best to offer the same in return. Every submission is owed due consideration. Though taxing, I know my contributions will tickle the fancy of whoever wrote the piece and offer them the same credence they hae patiently given me.


:clap:
Hanover December 15, 2022 at 21:25 #764232
A thought, not necessarily a perfect one, would be to next time present the stories upfront with the author's name known. The lack of anonymity would reduce the single blind experiment thing we've got going and might allow some bias to creep in, but it would actually increase my interest as stories were posted.

I say this because I expect that if I were to tell everyone which stories I had written, I would see a sudden jump in the comments as everyone broke the internet trying to see which were mine.
Vera Mont December 16, 2022 at 00:49 #764276
Sadly, I haven't been around long enough to know much about the posters, so i can't even begin to guess who writes what.
One things that surprised me was the ambition: so many contributors tackled subject matter that I considered too big for the constraints of the format - and several carried it off! I was really impressed.
Caldwell December 16, 2022 at 02:36 #764295
Everyone,

The names of the authors are up -- written in the respective titles.

Thank you all for participating!
Jamal December 16, 2022 at 03:06 #764300
Reply to Caldwell Thank you for your sterling work. :clap:

Caldwell December 16, 2022 at 03:10 #764301
Quoting Amity
When is the second round starting? On the same day, the 15th?

You can submit anytime -- I'll post them as they come in.

Quoting Tobias
Isn't it Caldwell's call to indicate whether there will be a winner or not?

This is not a competition. Members are still voting, I noticed, because the percentages are still shifting.

Quoting Benj96
But I relish the moment when all is revealed.
For what its worth, I love to comeradery. There is great sportsmanship here. Its very nice to see.

Thank you.

Quoting Vera Mont
One things that surprised me was the ambition: so many contributors tackled subject matter that I considered too big for the constraints of the format - and several carried it off! I was really impressed.

Yes, I was surprised as well. The comments are very, very helpful.

Quoting Jamal
Thank you for your sterling work

Thank you for letting our shenanigans shine through. :halo:







Jamal December 16, 2022 at 03:13 #764302
My personal favourites were A good-bye buzz, The Porn Shop, The Hairpin, and Waiting for the Midnight Mouse, though I liked others too. Well done to all the authors and commenters.
Caldwell December 16, 2022 at 03:19 #764304
There are two submissions that were written using ChatGPT. At least two that the contributors were nice enough to identify as such.
The reaction by the commenters was an immediate down-vote. I believe that the quality of the stories written by our authors truly separate them from the ones written by an AI.
Jamal December 16, 2022 at 03:44 #764308
Quoting Caldwell
You can submit anytime -- I'll post them as they come in.


This time I think I’ll wait a few days and polish it.

Caldwell December 16, 2022 at 04:33 #764316
Quoting Jamal
This time I think I’ll wait a few days and polish it.

Yes. :up:
Vera Mont December 16, 2022 at 05:00 #764318
Me three.
Benkei December 16, 2022 at 05:30 #764322
Funny how "Astronauts" is nobody's favourite but it still has the best score so far. I just had to point that out so I can claim the win for this activity. :razz:
Benkei December 16, 2022 at 05:31 #764323
Reply to Vera Mont Btw, excellent interpretations of both my stories. They were spot on with what I was trying to convey.
Baden December 16, 2022 at 12:49 #764398
Last comment before I go back on my posting break. "Astronauts" would be an absolutely deserved winner. Well done @Benkei :clap: :clap: :clap: . Also, thanks again @Caldwell for taking the reins for all this. :pray:
javi2541997 December 16, 2022 at 12:50 #764399
Congratulations to all the authors. Good stories. I enjoyed taking part in this contest. :up:
Benj96 December 16, 2022 at 13:00 #764404
Quoting Benkei
Funny how "Astronauts" is nobody's favourite but it still has the best score so far. I just had to point that out so I can claim the win for this activity.


It was in my top 4. Because I liked the sentimentality and felt its very relatable to the human condition of daily life and family dynamics.
Jack Cummins December 16, 2022 at 13:00 #764405
Congratulations to @Benkai and everyone. I do plan to read them and I am not sure whether they will still be open to votes when the break is over. Also, how long before it is possible to post entries? I wrote a couple a few days ago and would like to participate.

I am also surprised that there is no entry from @180 Proof, so I hope that he is okay. It was good to see so many people have joined in, especially @Banno", as a change from the logic of philosophy.

Amity December 16, 2022 at 13:26 #764413
Quoting Benkei
Funny how "Astronauts" is nobody's favourite but it still has the best score so far. I just had to point that out so I can claim the win for this activity


Congratulations! :fire:
I wrote this in a reply to Olivier but I think I'll spread my joy here :wink:

Amity:I reckon I was tired and more curmudgeonly than usual when I read your story and @Benkei's 'Astronaut'. Both should have raised my spirits. I guess that's why some stories work only at certain times.
If low, then all can seem dark...even the laughter of others...not a good place to be!
Thankfully, I'm not there long.

'Short Story 4 - MicroFiction' organised with such a generous spirit by @Caldwell did so much to brighten and lighten these cold, dark days. As did all the authors and engagement.
Thanks again :clap: :sparkle:


Addendum: also big :up: to all those working behind the scenes @Baden @Jamal et al.
Caldwell December 17, 2022 at 02:23 #764591
Quoting Jack Cummins
Also, how long before it is possible to post entries? I wrote a couple a few days ago and would like to participate.

You can submit them anytime. The allowed number of submissions now is 3 (it was changed from 2 submissions).

Quoting Jack Cummins
I am also surprised that there is no entry from 180 Proof, so I hope that he is okay

I'm pretty sure he's preparing.

Quoting Baden
Last comment before I go back on my posting break.

You deserve a break -- 13.8K posts!!


Thank you to all who contributed stories and wrote comments in the threads. Well worth the time. :heart:


Caldwell December 17, 2022 at 02:31 #764593
We're starting the second round.

@Jamal, we might need to separate the second round from the first. I pm'ed Baden.
180 Proof December 17, 2022 at 03:00 #764598
Quoting Caldwell
I am also surprised that there is no entry from 180 Proof, so I hope that he is okay
— Jack Cummins
I'm pretty sure he's preparing.

:yikes:
Jamal December 17, 2022 at 04:20 #764605
Reply to Caldwell I could create another category alongside this one, called “Short Story Activity Dec 22 (2)”. Unfortunately I can’t do it right now; I’m away from my computer and the drag n drop functionality for categories doesn’t work on iPad or phone.
Jamal December 17, 2022 at 05:11 #764611
Is it all that bad as it is though, mixed together? It’s quite easy to identify the new stories.
Caldwell December 17, 2022 at 05:13 #764612
Quoting Jamal
Is it all that bad as it is though, mixed together? It’s quite easy to identify the new stories.

Then we're good. No need to separate. :up:
Olivier5 December 17, 2022 at 10:04 #764629
Quoting Caldwell
No need to separate. :up:


So the new stories are the anonymous ones? There's just one I can see at the moment, Borderline Love Lost.
Jamal December 17, 2022 at 10:09 #764631
Reply to Olivier5 Yep, just one published so far.
Olivier5 December 17, 2022 at 10:40 #764633
Reply to Jamal Thanks :up:
ToothyMaw December 18, 2022 at 20:53 #764886
Thanks to the people who read my story and voted. I enjoyed reading everyone else's submissions too. The critical feedback was mostly great.

Honestly, I was surprised people weren't totally turned off by the blood details, even though they were a metaphor for the cyclical nature of cruelty and self-inflicted cruelty.

Or maybe that was me trying to sneak neoliberal values into a story about a tortured physicist. :razz:
Caldwell December 20, 2022 at 02:21 #765129
Reply to ToothyMaw Thank you for your contribution. Tortured physicist -- we don't get that often around here. :smile:
Jamal December 20, 2022 at 11:59 #765189
These short story contests always lose momentum when @Amity takes a break. Where is all your commentary, people?
Jack Cummins December 20, 2022 at 12:27 #765191
Reply to Jamal
I had noticed that it had faded out and I was waiting until it picks up again to be involved. It will be a shame if it drifts away because likes have already been cast mid way. Amity and others may be busy, especially as it is Christmas week which is a time when many people meet up with friends etc.. There are so many entries to read and I am certainly hoping to have the time in between Christmas and New Year to read them properly. I also was planning to submit my own in the next few days but don't want to do so if people have lost all interest.
Jamal December 20, 2022 at 12:29 #765192
Reply to Jack Cummins But I see you've been busy doing some actual philosophy in your "What is Creativity?" discussion. :up:
Jack Cummins December 20, 2022 at 12:40 #765194
Reply to Jamal
I have been doing philosophy in my what is creativity thread because thinking/philosophy is my default mode, often done in bed. To get into a creative mode I have to go out and find somewhere pleasant to do it and get into the right frame of mind. This is probably why I started the thread. Even hot water bottles in bed leave me in a grungy state of uninspiration.

Jamal December 20, 2022 at 12:41 #765195
Tobias December 20, 2022 at 12:43 #765196
Quoting Caldwell
Tortured physicist -- we don't get that often around here.


I'm actually afraid we have many of them within our ranks...
Vera Mont December 20, 2022 at 16:46 #765232
Quoting Tobias
I'm actually afraid we have many of them within our ranks...


Then we should probably stop torturing them. At least for the holy season.

I've been giving likes to the new submissions, but withholding comment, because I felt a bit contrite about having been overly critical last round. I'll see to reviewing when I've decided whether my second attempt turns into anything.
Tobias December 20, 2022 at 18:02 #765254
Quoting Vera Mont
Then we should probably stop torturing them. At least for the holy season.


I'd never resort to torturing physicists.... Geographers perhaps or those pesky biologists, but not physicists, they elicit a deep compassion within my soul.

Quoting Vera Mont
I've been giving likes to the new submissions, but withholding comment, because I felt a bit contrite about having been overly critical last round. I'll see to reviewing when I've decided whether my second attempt turns into anything.


Were you critical? I feel I was, but I am much more critical then you, or at least more vocal about it. These days manners get softer and softer and we handle each other with silken gloves as they say in the Netherlands. A country known for its rather blunt populace.
Caldwell December 21, 2022 at 02:01 #765426
Quoting Vera Mont
I've been giving likes to the new submissions, but withholding comment, because I felt a bit contrite about having been overly critical last round. I'll see to reviewing when I've decided whether my second attempt turns into anything.

For the record, you're not overly critical -- I read your comments. Also, I'm doing the same, hitting the like button, but not saying anything.
god must be atheist December 21, 2022 at 02:26 #765434
I think the organizers must hire official and professional literary critics if they can't stop complaining about the lack of involvement in terms of critiquing the writings here.

Basically, it's their fault. They made the participation voluntary. That was a big mistake, if you want oodles of critiquing. You must make membership contingent on an increasing number of daily critical analyses about everything that appears here, including other critiques; failure will be punished by exclusion from the forums for x number of days, which X increases with each new breach of this rule.
:grimace:
:lol:
:rofl:
Jack Cummins December 21, 2022 at 06:30 #765472
Reply to god must be atheist
It would be ridiculous to make demands that in order to participate in the contest people have to make a number of critiques or be punished. It would be worse than being at the strictest school or institution. Even then, schools have holidays and free time. It is good that the forum is available for all at the times they need it but it is also meant to be enjoyable.

Fiction in particular probably needs to be approached and appreciated in a more relaxed way than the hardcore problems of philosophy. I am not wishing to trivialise fiction because it is an art. I am also aware that you have your own thread on philosophy as fiction and I have one on creativity. These may be important but some of it can become incredibly tense and heavy. I certainly wish to read and try to appreciate the stories for what they are, which I am hoping to do in the holiday period when life may be a little less pressured hopefully. It is important that everyone can participate on their own terms.

Banno December 22, 2022 at 02:48 #765735
Could we move the short stories off the main page? Its getting cluttered. Folk who are interested could go to the relevant subforum.
Jamal December 22, 2022 at 02:59 #765742
Reply to Banno Makes sense, and I’d personally be happy with that, but people seem to find it difficult to click on a category and they’ll berate me no end.

By the way, there are no sub-forums, because there is just one forum, which is the site itself. What you call sub-forums are actually categories. Forgive my pedantry; the “sub-forum” business on old PF always annoyed me.
Jamal December 22, 2022 at 03:04 #765745
And it’s just a festive community thing anyway. It’s not like it’s all the time.
Banno December 22, 2022 at 06:10 #765761
Ok. Grit your teeth, Banno.
Jamal December 22, 2022 at 06:23 #765762
Reply to Banno Next time I’ll argue for having them hidden. Not only is it cluttersome and annoying for those who aren’t interested, it’s also not good for the authors to have their stories seen and possibly voted on by anyone other than those who are.
Benkei December 22, 2022 at 06:59 #765764
Reply to Jamal Engagement is much higher though, which is great.
Jamal December 22, 2022 at 07:05 #765766
Reply to Benkei I shall rack my agile mind for a solution that will ensure satisfaction for all.
Jamal December 22, 2022 at 07:15 #765767
My first idea is a radical one. A whole new site for short story contests, reading groups for fiction, and related discussions. It would also be hosted on PlushForums, and it would be a kind of sister site to TPF.

Even if I did that, nobody need worry that I’d abandon TPF, if that’s a concern to anyone. I don’t think my empire would be overextended with a mere two sites.
god must be atheist December 22, 2022 at 11:04 #765780
Quoting Jack Cummins
It would be ridiculous to make demands that in order to participate in the contest people have to make a number of critiques or be punished.


I agree. I said that in jest. A man or a woman or a person of any gender needs to recognize jest once it / she / he sees it.

By-the-by, I intended to show that the post was in jest by showing these at the end:

:grimace:
:lol:
:rofl:
god must be atheist December 22, 2022 at 13:50 #765793
Quoting Jamal
A whole new site for short story contests, reading groups for fiction, and related discussions.


Hurray! What's the URL? Is joining contingent on recommendation by existing members?
Jamal December 22, 2022 at 14:10 #765795
Reply to god must be atheist Just an idea, so far.
god must be atheist December 22, 2022 at 14:43 #765799
Reply to Jamal Ah, sigh...
Daniel December 22, 2022 at 14:44 #765800
Reply to Banno Im able to hide the stories from the main page by going to the short stories category (short stories dec 22), scrolling all the way down, and clicking on the eye icon on the bottom left.

Jamal December 22, 2022 at 15:01 #765805
Reply to Daniel Wow, I didn't even know people could do that. I kind of assumed that functionality was for staff. Thanks :up:
Vera Mont December 22, 2022 at 15:40 #765811
Quoting Jamal
A whole new site for short story contests, reading groups for fiction, and related discussions. It would also be hosted on PlushForums, and it would be a kind of sister site to TPF.


I love a radical idea - especially if it has to do with fiction. Beam me up, Captain.
Jamal December 22, 2022 at 16:04 #765812
Reply to Vera Mont Excellent, that's two enthusiastic members so far.

Concerns in the beginning would be getting enough paying subscribers to cover the cost and whether to open it up to the unregulated registration of new members. And there are already several forums that do the same thing, so what would be the point? (I think there would be a point but it's worth asking what it is).

Also, the Elders of the Internet have been saying for years that online forums are dying. I'm sceptical about that, though. Social media and Reddit don't quite cover what a forum does, in my opinion. Discord, I'm not sure how that fits in.

However, @Banno's problem is solved so there's no longer a pressing need for anything else.

As I say, it's just an idea. I like it, though.

The solution to Banno's problem, or, how to hide a category from the main page
Banno December 22, 2022 at 19:56 #765857
Reply to Daniel Nice. Thank you.

180 Proof December 22, 2022 at 20:44 #765865
Reply to Daniel Awesome! :cool:
Benkei December 22, 2022 at 21:02 #765870
Reply to Jamal I like it mixed. Keeps the community more vibrant to have a certain seasonality and change to it. Daniel's solution works too.

Also, never take Banno seriously.
Baden December 22, 2022 at 21:47 #765878
Quoting Jamal
My first idea is a radical one. A whole new site for short story contests, reading groups for fiction, and related discussions. It would also be hosted on PlushForums, and it would be a kind of sister site to TPF.


:eyes: :up:
Caldwell December 24, 2022 at 06:04 #766246
Quoting Jamal
My first idea is a radical one. A whole new site for short story contests, reading groups for fiction, and related discussions. It would also be hosted on PlushForums, and it would be a kind of sister site to TPF.


:up:
Hanover December 24, 2022 at 19:05 #766310
Reply to Jamal After the first contest, I joined a creative writing forum for a short time and uploaded my story for comments. I did get some good feedback.

Many of the posters were aspiring authors with backgrounds in creative writing. Finding those folks is always helpful.

It's a curious thing why an interest in creative writing and philosophy correlates.

Anyway, radical new projects always hold my interest and will help however I can.
Jamal December 25, 2022 at 11:58 #766437
Amity December 26, 2022 at 09:53 #766556
Quoting Jamal
My first idea is a radical one. A whole new site for short story contests, reading groups for fiction, and related discussions. It would also be hosted on PlushForums, and it would be a kind of sister site to TPF.

Even if I did that, nobody need worry that I’d abandon TPF, if that’s a concern to anyone. I don’t think my empire would be overextended with a mere two sites.


Radical indeed. Quite the stretch from the initial decision of only having the contest once a year.
It sounds good in theory. The challenge of hosting another site will inevitably mean another stretch; the danger of spreading yourself and others too thin. But might just be worth it. Nothing ventured...

Quoting Jamal
Concerns in the beginning would be getting enough paying subscribers to cover the cost and whether to open it up to the unregulated registration of new members. And there are already several forums that do the same thing, so what would be the point? (I think there would be a point but it's worth asking what it is).


What/where are the other forums that do the same thing? How do they operate - free or by subscription?
What would you offer that others don't? What is your motivation? What can you do there that you can't do here?

Quoting Benkei
I like it mixed. Keeps the community more vibrant

I agree. Writing/reading/analysing in any form can only stimulate the thought process.
There is much overlap.

Quoting Hanover
It's a curious thing why an interest in creative writing and philosophy correlates.

Not really. What makes you think so?
In my opinion, I think it would be a fine thing if this site could be improved to accommodate both easily.

Quoting Hanover
I joined a creative writing forum for a short time and uploaded my story for comments. I did get some good feedback.


Excellent.
The key being 'for a short time'. Also, the feedback - what type and from whom. Did you have to pay for this - how much? Did you re-write the story? How was it improved - can we read the new version of it here?

~~~

The short story contest and the feedback have made me realise my shortcomings in literature.
I am considering starting this course on 16th January. That is, if my weary brain is up for it - there are 4 novels to read...

https://www.futurelearn.com/courses/how-to-read-a-novel

The four novels explored for this course are:
Week 1 (Plot): Libertie by Kaitlyn Greenidge
Week 2 (Characterisation): Memorial by Bryan Washington
Week 3 ( Dialogue): A Shock by Keith Ridgway
Week 4 (Setting): English Magic by Uschi Gatward

~~~

It might stretch me a little too much but apparently, you can return to try again.
A free 4-week course is worth a shot...?

Wishing everyone the very best in the coming year. Good luck with all your various projects!





Jamal December 26, 2022 at 12:00 #766560
Quoting Amity
I am considering starting this course on 16th January. That is, if my weary brain is up for it - there are 4 novels to read


Looks good. I don't know the novels but the presentation of the course fills one with confidence. University of Edinburgh too. :up:

Quoting Amity
What/where are the other forums that do the same thing? How do they operate - free or by subscription?
What would you offer that others don't? What is your motivation? What can you do there that you can't do here?


Good questions.

Greetings of the season!
Hanover December 26, 2022 at 13:08 #766570
Quoting Amity
Excellent.
The key being 'for a short time'. Also, the feedback - what type and from whom. Did you have to pay for this - how much? Did you re-write the story? How was it improved - can we read the new version of it here?


It was site like this one, where you post your stories, asked questions, debated whatever,, and the posters there were active, so they commented on your story. It didn't cost anything.

You can Google "creative wring forums" and find them.
god must be atheist December 26, 2022 at 14:29 #766579
Quoting Hanover
You can Google "creative wring forums" and find them.


Them fr'ing wr'ing forums.
Amity December 26, 2022 at 15:47 #766597
Quoting Jamal
... University of Edinburgh too. :up:

Yep :up:

Quoting Jamal

Greetings of the season!


Happy thoughts and good vibes sent your way :cool: :victory:
Where are you again?

Quoting Hanover
It was site like this one, where you post your stories, asked questions, debated whatever,, and the posters there were active, so they commented on your story. It didn't cost anything.


Yeah, so it would be interesting to see what extra @Jamal's proposed new site would bring... apart from the need to subscribe :chin:
Doesn't TPF already have the facility to do all this? If not, then participants can be re-directed to one of the better 'creative writing forums'.

Quoting Hanover
You can Google "creative wring forums" and find them.

:lol: Yes indeed I could...
I was hoping any advice would lead me to your chosen one. Never mind.

Noble Dust December 26, 2022 at 16:17 #766606
Quoting Benkei
I like it mixed. Keeps the community more vibrant to have a certain seasonality and change to it. Daniel's solution works too.


I agree.
Jamal December 26, 2022 at 16:20 #766607
Quoting Amity
Where are you again?


Denia in Spain. I wrote a story about it. Forgettable, it seems. :cry:
Amity December 26, 2022 at 17:01 #766619
Reply to Jamal
I'm in denial :razz:
Jamal December 26, 2022 at 17:05 #766621
Hanover December 26, 2022 at 18:27 #766655
Quoting Amity
was hoping any advice would lead me to your chosen one. Never mind.


This is the one I landed on.

https://www.writingforums.org/
Caldwell December 26, 2022 at 19:06 #766669
Everyone,

Someone wants to submit a fourth story. So, let's relax the rule -- make it 4 submissions total. (Like what Jamal had suggested before).

Thanks.
Amity December 26, 2022 at 20:36 #766709
Quoting Hanover
This is the one I landed on.

https://www.writingforums.org/


Thank you :pray:

I'm hooked. Just spent an hour browsing...threads like:

'[b]Do you think there's an equivalent to practising scales in terms of writing?'

'The power of telling and exposition when done right'.[/b]

from Creative Writing Forums - Writing Help, Writing Workshops, & Writing Community

And then there is the Lounge:
https://www.writingforums.org/the-lounge/

'What are you doing?...continued'
Fun responses with Christmas cooking :cool:

TPF eat your heart out...this is one majorly organised site.
But I guess with income from adverts...and so on...

I like the 'Contests', 'Resources' etc...as part of the top menu. Easy to access.

Edit:
More generally, the Welcome - Quick Start Guide with its Guides and Map.
So well done; informative and funny:

This is the quick and dirty to get you up and running in the forum. We will give you links throughout that will take you to the more detailed information.


https://www.writingforums.org/threads/new-member-quick-start-guide.132102/

Amity December 29, 2022 at 11:32 #767378
Quoting Caldwell
Everyone,

Someone wants to submit a fourth story. So, let's relax the rule -- make it 4 submissions total. (Like what Jamal had suggested before).

Thanks.


So again, if you want to relax the rules, then the OP should be edited accordingly.

Quoting Caldwell
2) Max two submissions per member.


Quoting Caldwell
We will only accept two submissions per participant.


Quoting Caldwell
The above rules are not negotiable.




Amity December 29, 2022 at 13:13 #767400
Re: late change of rules to accommodate someone's wishes.

It would be good if the submissions were numbered 1 to 4.
Given time limits, I would pay more attention to 1st and 2nd entries.
As things stand...it seems unfair...

I'm about to bow out. It's become too much to keep track of and comment.
Thanks to all authors for your fantastic gifts :clap: :heart: :sparkle:

Have a Happy New Year :party:


Jack Cummins December 29, 2022 at 15:14 #767425
Reply to Amity
I think we should all be thanking you for your fantastic detail of reviews. I am trying to read them but there are just so many popping up. I do think that it seems unfair if changes are being made as things go along because unless people log in very regularly and read this thread it is possible to not be aware of such changes. Also, with the evaluation of likes, my understanding was that this time the emphasis was more upon it being a workshop activity rather than as a competition.

Happy New Year, and I hope that you enjoy your literature course,
Jack

Amity December 29, 2022 at 15:22 #767427
Quoting Jack Cummins
I think we should all be thanking you for your fantastic detail of reviews [...] Happy New Year, and I hope that you enjoy your literature course,
Jack


Thank you, Jack, for your kind words and own generous spirit. I don't necessarily want to drown in heaps of thanks :wink: but authors' feedback in their story discussions is good for the soul.

Looking forward to the course and have started reading as preparation. I need to focus on that now.
Take care and hope the New Year brings all that you hope for :sparkle:
Baden December 30, 2022 at 15:11 #767705
@Caldwell's relaxed and flexible approach to all this has worked really well imo. Being able to please everyone all the time is too high a bar for any of us. But let's be thankful she put herself out there when no one else wanted to.
Jamal December 30, 2022 at 15:56 #767712
Reply to Baden Agreed.
Amity December 30, 2022 at 16:18 #767728
Reply to Baden Reply to Jamal
The gratitude, the flexibility, the patience and more already communicated and still appreciated.
Without @Caldwell none of this would have happened :sparkle: Thank you again :clap: :100:

Quoting Baden
Being able to please everyone all the time is too high a bar for any of us.


Of course but that is not what was being discussed.

It was the pleasing of a 'someone' at a very late stage in the game and the 'let's relax the rule'.
As if 'we' had any say in the matter when it seemed to be @Caldwell's decision, alone.
Who was she talking to? Behind the scenes... you?

Anyway, it no longer matters. It's done. Keep having fun, everyone :pray:







Baden December 30, 2022 at 17:41 #767744
Quoting Amity
Who was she talking to? You?


No.

Quoting Amity
Anyway, it no longer matters


It never did as far as I'm concerned.
Amity December 30, 2022 at 18:01 #767750
Reply to Baden Noted.

Quoting Baden
It never did as far as I'm concerned.


So, why this apparent need to step in to defend and protect after some critical points made?
We have all thanked @Caldwell for volunteering and learning on the job which others didn't want.
Not an easy task, for sure, and the mutual feedback has been excellent.

Can we leave it there, then? Or you can have the last word...


Caldwell December 31, 2022 at 19:54 #768031
Everyone,

The names of the writers have been listed in the stories.

Lots of thanks to everyone who participated -- both the writers and commenters.

For the second round, I'll list them here, in no particular order:

@unenlightened
@Benj96
@0 thru 9
@Jack Cummins
@180 Proof
@god must be atheist
@hypericin
@Tobias
@Hanover
@Jamal
@Janus
@Noble Dust
@New2K2
@Benkei
@Ciceronianus
@Vera Mont
@Daniel
@TheMadMan
@Olivier5

Thank you all for sharing your stories. Good job! :heart:

PS: we have one writer who wanted to remain anonymous. I still would like to thank him for a wonderful effort.

A new staff will be coming on board to man the fiction category. It's our very own @hypericin. Thank you for volunteering your time to this activity. Be good to the Baden. He's our big boss.
Jamal December 31, 2022 at 20:14 #768039
Reply to Caldwell Thank you Caldwell, great job. Big success.
Caldwell December 31, 2022 at 20:15 #768040
Reply to Jamal Thank you. I'm just happy that we crazy-makers have a place in your heart. hahaha! :sweat:
New2K2 December 31, 2022 at 20:39 #768043
Was fun. Happy New year in Advance.
Baden December 31, 2022 at 22:23 #768078
Reply to Caldwell

Thanks and well done! Really appreciate you stepping up for this. :clap:

And Happy New Year to all our authors and readers!
god must be atheist January 01, 2023 at 00:02 #768117
Thanks, Caldwell, and happy New Year to you and to all members on this site (but to nobody else off it.) :joke:

With this wish I may solve the global warming crisis and the overpopulation crisis. Only members on this site could survive because the rest of humanity dies of depression, exposure, and of excruciating boredom.
hypericin January 01, 2023 at 00:27 #768127
I think this went really well. The format got me lazy, It will be even harder dredging up a full short story next time. I didn't miss the competition aspect, now it feels extraneous to me.

Thanks for your hard work Caldwell!
Olivier5 January 01, 2023 at 11:37 #768228
Joining my voice to the acclaimations. Well done @Caldwell! Thanks for your good work, patience, and for being such a good reader. Also thanks to the writers and commentators, this was real fun and dare I say... sophisticated. :joke:

Happy New Year to all!
Jamal January 01, 2023 at 11:42 #768229
Was anyone else surprised by who the authors were? I certainly wasn’t expecting “Gentle Reader”—one of my favourites—to be by @unenlightened. I thought it must have been @Tobias.
Amity January 01, 2023 at 11:58 #768232
Quoting Jamal
Was anyone else surprised by who the authors were?


Well. I've decided never to play the guessing game again. I only got 2 and a half right.

The story that threw me most was 'Frozen Bodies, Warm Hearts' by @0 thru 9.
My interpretation went all to hell cos I was convinced it was by @180 Proof :yikes:

I hope there's some feedback on it...or do I? :chin:

I think that shows the versatility of TPF authors. So many different styles. Brilliant lot :clap:

Tobias January 01, 2023 at 12:35 #768236
Quoting Jamal
Was anyone else surprised by who the authors were? I certainly wasn’t expecting “Gentle Reader”—one of my favourites—to be by unenlightened. I thought it must have been @Tobias.


Yes it puzzled me as well. I always seem to guess wrong. I pinpointed @Benkei for about Face and it is @180 Proof. I thought Penelope was 180 Proof and it was you. As for Gentle Reader, I would not think of writing that. Not that I do not like it, but it would be inconceivable for me to write a story in that kind of language and that subject matter. And yet, you pinpointed me, which also says something about perception and self perception. Here we dwell, we interact, talk, sometimes quite candidly. We only know each other by our words. Yet, we cannot recognize each of us by the words they speak. You have your own Tobias, as I have my own Jamal or 180 Proof. In here, in the forum, it is no big deal, just a funny determination. We accept it easily because indeed we recognize we have far from full information.

I wonder though to what extent this forum is different from real life and if it is so, if in real life the same misconceptions do not happen, what than is the key to knowing the other? If the forum is not different and if we have only more information in real life, but no qualitative jump towards real knowledge of each other, than we live in a Leibnizian world. in this world we monadically bounce of against one another, without any means to penetrate, for lack of a better word, the other's 'essence', as Hanover put it.
Incdentally, that is what all my stories are about, except maybe The Hairpin.
Jamal January 01, 2023 at 12:42 #768237
Quoting Tobias
As for Gentle Reader, I would not think of writing that. Not that I do not like it, but it would be inconceivable for me to write a story in that kind of language and that subject matter. And yet, you pinpointed me, which also says something about perception and self perception


It didn’t strike me as a work of yours, because I see your work as more sensuous and emotive, but among the writers I thought were taking part, I settled on you, because the author seemed to be well-read in both philosophy and fiction.

Quoting Tobias
You have your own Tobias


Yes, he is a gnome-like fellow whom I force to wear yellow dungarees and a lime green hat on the rare occasions I let him out of his cage.
Amity January 01, 2023 at 12:52 #768238
Quoting Tobias
And yet, you pinpointed me, which also says something about perception and self perception. Here we dwell, we interact, talk, sometimes quite candidly. We only know each other by our words. Yet, we cannot recognize each of us by the words they speak.


Yes. I think that we all hope to understand and be understood by what we say and how we interact.
If there has been a close connection, then we feel we know the person, even when we really don't.

It might not be a big deal but it can be disappointing when misread or misrepresented.
The authors hope to please and be recognised, I think, one way or another.
However, they have only themselves to blame if we guess their fiction wrong.
It shows their versatility in all kinds of style, subject matter and language :clap: :sparkle:
Tobias January 01, 2023 at 14:57 #768262
Quoting Jamal
Yes, he is a gnome-like fellow whom I force to wear yellow dungarees and a lime green hat on the rare occasions I let him out of his cage.


Gosh, we can form an accurate picture of a person through his words!

Quoting Amity
It might not be a big deal but it can be disappointing when misread or misrepresented.


For me personally, I like all interpretations of my story. Even if they were not the way I thought of it. I see myself as pone interpreter, maybe with a bit more intimate knowledge of the characters. However, things others see in them are also there. The story is not 'mine', it acquires a life of its own.

Quoting Amity
The authors hope to please and be recognised, I think, one way or another.
Certainly, they are a vain bunch. Every recognition though is also misrecognition, as we never recognize who he or she is, but our idea of them. That is not bad though. We never truly establish our focus right which forces us to focus again, reinterpret and rerecognize. I think that is what keeps the game alive.

Quoting Amity
However, they have only themselves to blame if we guess their fiction wrong.


Well, it takes two to tango. The reader can also be lazy or have had a bad day. Also, for me there is no 'right or wrong', there is a more or less thoughtful reading. Every thoughtful reading adds to my understanding of the story, also as an author. I do not have all the answers too. \Quoting Amity
It shows their versatility in all kinds of style, subject matter and language :clap: :sparkle:

And that is really cool! :cool: And again... good writing needs good reading. We see what happens when you do not comment. The interest and productivity decreases. Thank you Amity :sparkle:




Amity January 01, 2023 at 15:13 #768268
Quoting Tobias
Well, it takes two to tango.


Or to dance the Gay Gordon. Och aye! :cool:



It's more fun (when drunk) at a Hogmanay Ceilidh :party:
Tobias January 01, 2023 at 15:19 #768270
Quoting Amity
It's more fun when drunk at a Ceilidh :party:


It looks like a lot of fun. I hope for you a Ceilidh is where you were for New Year's Eve! I love dancing, The problem is I am a talentless hack with no coordination. But hey still love it.

edit: Thanks by the way @Jamal :smile:

god must be atheist January 02, 2023 at 10:48 #768593
Quoting hypericin
The format got me lazy, It will be even harder dredging up a full short story next time.


Likewise. I've come to solve the problem of needing to satisfy two oppositionary forces (need to create i.e. need to get a lot of sheisse off of my chest, and need to be short, i.e. lack of focus) by writing poetry these days. It's sheisse all the way, but it keeps me off the streets.

By-the-by, is there a chance, or need, or popular demand, for a poetry extravaganza?
hypericin January 03, 2023 at 20:11 #769106
Quoting god must be atheist
By-the-by, is there a chance, or need, or popular demand, for a poetry extravaganza?


I volunteered to run the next one of these "activities",, it is something to consider if there is interest.
Jamal January 03, 2023 at 20:18 #769110
Quoting hypericin
I volunteered to run the next one of these "activities"


:clap: :up:
Baden January 03, 2023 at 20:25 #769115
Reply to hypericin

Thanks, meant to PM you about that actually. Happy to have you on board, particularly as you wrote what was probably my favourite story this time round. :up:
Jamal January 03, 2023 at 20:44 #769132
Noble Dust January 03, 2023 at 20:49 #769139
Reply to Jamal

Just like in T Ball, we were all winners this time around.
Baden January 03, 2023 at 20:52 #769144
Reply to Jamal

Hey, your story "In the Way of the Burritos" was pretty cool too. Unforgettable, really. :up:
Jamal January 03, 2023 at 20:58 #769151
Reply to Noble Dust I don’t know what T Ball is, but…dare I say…I’m the only one who got a score as high as 92%? @Benkei got more upvotes for his masterful “Astronauts”, but my percentage is higher. That’s gotta count for something right?

Be that as it may, I will put aside my ego and name my favourites, according to my own particular and possibly weird taste:

A goodbye buzz
Buried Treasure
Penelope
Nightmare in D Minor
The hairpin
Gentle Reader
In the Wake of the Moriscos
The Porn Shop
Waiting for the Midnight Mouse

Several others I thought were good but I didn’t get on with so much.
Jamal January 03, 2023 at 20:59 #769152
Reply to Baden Appreciate it :heart:
Baden January 03, 2023 at 21:10 #769161
Benkei January 03, 2023 at 21:10 #769162
Reply to Jamal I was on one lesser vote before my name was added to it and then the lower votes started to stream in.
Jamal January 03, 2023 at 21:12 #769164
Reply to Benkei And here was I thinking I was less popular than you.
Baden January 03, 2023 at 21:28 #769171
Reply to Benkei

I could vote down "Penelope" if that would help?
Baden January 03, 2023 at 21:29 #769172
Sorry meant to send that by PM. :yikes: :lol:
Jamal January 03, 2023 at 21:32 #769177
Reply to Baden It’s my own fault. I’ve been cruising for a bruising.
Baden January 03, 2023 at 21:34 #769181
Reply to Jamal

My stories were not very impactful, so I hope to alleviate my pain by spreading it around. :up:
Jamal January 03, 2023 at 21:36 #769184
Reply to Baden Your flame burned brightly while it lasted, and we’ll always remember that.
Jamal January 03, 2023 at 21:37 #769186
Sorry for being obnoxious by the way.
Baden January 03, 2023 at 21:40 #769192
Quoting Jamal
Your flame burned brightly while it lasted, and we’ll always remember that.


Quoting Jamal
Sorry for being obnoxious by the way.



No, that was a good one. Don't spoil my cremation! :halo:
hypericin January 03, 2023 at 22:53 #769241
Quoting Baden
Happy to have you on board, particularly as you wrote what was probably my favourite story this time round. :up:


Thanks! I knew at least one fellow weirdo would appreciate it.
Baden January 03, 2023 at 23:29 #769264
Reply to hypericin

That I am. :up:
Caldwell January 04, 2023 at 01:40 #769304
Quoting Baden
I could vote down "Penelope" if that would help?


Quoting Baden
Sorry meant to send that by PM

:smile:

Quoting Benkei
I was on one lesser vote before my name was added to it and then the lower votes started to stream in.

They couldn't allow you to be too big.

.
Benkei January 04, 2023 at 06:08 #769335
Reply to Jamal You've got admirers, groupies and sycophants. On the plus side, I've got people who feel really strongly about my online persona. And any attention is good attention. :love: