Abstract Conspiracy - By Varde

Caldwell December 08, 2022 at 02:30 900 views 17 comments
While swollen winds in water wade away, the wider green muddy ward stays crumbling in pitter rain - swelling once again. And again.

Grimy wetted land we breached to the solemn sun - three hours away from setting. Blinding light foiled by brushing leaves and twigs that molted and melted twine...

Over to plains, blazing by sky blue, as the rain also tithers where weather held a rare frame.

Blackened fight in wondering wary, understanding soggy for it was in my way. Fortune is merry but vile of darkest grain, splatter, splintering bold.

Comments (17)

Noble Dust December 08, 2022 at 05:59 #761783
I like the poetic language, but I end up reading it for its sound, which distracts me from any narrative, which there doesn't seem to be. Not sure how it's a story; more of a poem.
Vera Mont December 08, 2022 at 06:54 #761791
Same here. Don't know how I feel about that many w's.
Amity December 08, 2022 at 19:32 #761917
Abstract Conspiracy

Puzzling title.
Abstract: a concept or idea; impressionistic art; a short textual piece; a summary.
Conspiracy: trickiness; a plot against; a frame-up.

Quoting Caldwell
While swollen winds in water wade away, the wider green muddy ward stays crumbling in pitter rain - swelling once again. And again.


Painting a scene with swollen, swelling w-words and green viscous muddiness (oil colours).

Quoting Caldwell
Grimy wetted land we breached to the solemn sun - three hours away from setting. Blinding light foiled by brushing leaves and twigs that molted and melted twine...


Action. Breaking through grime and slime to reach the light. Too bright. So lessened with the natural fibres of a paintbrush. Melding the colours.

Quoting Caldwell
Over to plains, blazing by sky blue, as the rain also tithers where weather held a rare frame.


Landscape impressionism. The rain in Spain stays mainly on the plain - or does it?
Weather holding a rare frame. Is this about climate change...

Quoting Caldwell
Blackened fight in wondering wary, understanding soggy for it was in my way. Fortune is merry but vile of darkest grain, splatter, splintering bold.


A blackened fight. The Conspiracy of the title?
Trying to understand what is going on. Too many conflicting points of view and agendas.

Fortune as depicted in philosophy. Merry but vile. Bright Light v Bold Dark.
The Consolation of Philosophy by Boethius.

Quoting LitCharts - The Consolation of Philosophy
Fortune is the moody and cruel goddess of fortune or chance. Fortune enjoys crushing humans’ dreams by “seduc[ing]” them with good luck and then taking everything away, as though sending them around a wheel that “brings the top to the bottom and the bottom to the top.” Because Fortune is untrustworthy and fickle, Philosophy implores Boethius and his readers not to trust her with their happiness, and instead tells them to turn to God.


Is the certainty of a God the answer?
Is philosophy with all its conflicting theories and practice?
Are we determined or fated to be conspired against. What role the play or conflict in our minds/hearts?

***

Well. I had no idea where my thoughts were leading in this most original presentation.
Questions and abstract ideas so framed.

I look forward to light being thrown; the picture clearing a little as to the meaning.
I like this not-obvious, blurry vision.
Thank you, dear author, :clap:
Even if I was way off track, it was fun to read and 'listen' to this creative process and product unfold.
:fire:





javi2541997 December 08, 2022 at 19:40 #761921
Grimy wetted land we breached to the solemn sun - three hours away from setting. Blinding light foiled by brushing leaves and twigs that molted and melted twine...


Beautiful, poetic and colourful. I really like when someone gets inspired by nature and sun. When it says "three hours away from setting" it seems that the author was experiencing the sunset. I completely feel it because is one of the main examples where our environment shows us a lot of vibration. Tons of poems and novels were written based on the solemn sun.
I liked this.

Congratulations author.
javi2541997 December 08, 2022 at 19:42 #761922
Quoting Amity
Action. Breaking through grime and slime to reach the light. Too bright. So lessened with the natural fibres of a paintbrush. Melding the colours.


Yeah, I felt the same. It was a colourful explosion in my mind. It was like if I was observing a paint related to autumn. Similar to Van Gogh's works
Amity December 08, 2022 at 19:44 #761925
Amity December 09, 2022 at 13:27 #762153
Reply to javi2541997
Did you ever wonder at any point whether this was a bit of tomfoolery?
Jiggery-poking about with a steam-fuelled story-generator? :chin:
javi2541997 December 09, 2022 at 13:32 #762157
Quoting Amity
tomfoolery?


I never heard about this word, so I had to find out a meaning and google says: silly behaviour, especially done as a joke.

No, I don't see in that way. I just interpret it as a poem about the nature and environment around the author. He or she seems to be a pretty sensitive person with the words.
Amity December 09, 2022 at 13:45 #762161
Reply to javi2541997
Yes, you can still be sensitive after a jiggery-poke with a generator.
It can stimulate you, or so I've heard :razz:
What's the Spanish for 'tomfoolery' then?
javi2541997 December 09, 2022 at 13:58 #762166
Quoting Amity
It can stimulate you, or so I've heard


That's right!

Quoting Amity
What's the Spanish for 'tomfoolery' then?


Payaso or Imbécil can fit in the meaning of "tomfoolery"
Also, payaso means "clown" in English. But, whenever someone acts with silly behaviour, we say: este chico es un payaso = this boy is a clown
Baden December 09, 2022 at 16:00 #762192
Quoting Amity
Did you ever wonder at any point whether this was a bit of tomfoolery?


Definite possibility with this one. It's pretty much a Rorschach blot.
Amity December 11, 2022 at 08:45 #762813
Quoting Baden
Definite possibility with this one. It's pretty much a Rorschach blot.


The only person I recall using a generator was I think @Benkei.
In the first competition, he fooled us with 'We're Not Alone'.

Benkei, are you the culprit this time? :chin:

Tobias December 11, 2022 at 11:29 #762850
It feels to me like a stylistic excercise. It invokes images, especially of cold, wet nasty swamplands. Yet I do not know what is happening there. Impressionistic indeed.
javi2541997 December 11, 2022 at 12:58 #762867
Quoting Tobias
It feels to me like a stylistic excercise. It invokes images, especially of cold, wet nasty swamplands. Yet I do not know what is happening there. Impressionistic indeed.


Exactly. I felt the same feeling. It looks like you are watching a paint or a photograph of a autumn plains.
Jamal December 11, 2022 at 13:00 #762868
Quoting Caldwell
Over to plains, blazing by sky blue, as the rain also tithers where weather held a rare frame.


It's nonsense, in the literary sense, and possibly also nonsense in the ordinary sense. Tithers?
Amity December 11, 2022 at 14:45 #762884
Quoting Jamal
Over to plains, blazing by sky blue, as the rain also tithers where weather held a rare frame.
— Caldwell

It's nonsense, in the literary sense, and possibly also nonsense in the ordinary sense. Tithers?


Possibly nonsense. A wetwash of watercolour with no need for perfection.

Sometimes there is no meaning. You just gotta stand back and appreciate. Let your mind flow gently into the dark night. Shapes and patterns mingling. Dreams with no real representations of things.

'Tithers' - might conjure up dithers. An uncertain rain - which might drizzle, dampen or downpour.
Or the paying of tithes: rain blessing or drenching dry plains.

Quoting Baden
Rorschach blot.


An Inkblot of a story. The author having fun with the readers. Who can come up with the weirdest interpretation of splashy ambiguity? What, if anything, it says about personality?

Abstract Conspiracy.
A conceptual, perceptual trickery.
We are the subjects in a test of imagination. Or something...
A little joke signifying nothing.

Benj96 December 14, 2022 at 17:30 #763873
It's very poetic and figurative. So I will do my best to transfigure it into something literal. For the sole purpose of a second format of appreciation. Not sure if i will get it right as its very interpretative but why not have a go?

Quoting Caldwell
While swollen winds in water wade away, the wider green muddy ward stays crumbling in pitter rain - swelling once again. And again.

"While currents ebb, the low tide Mudlands are revealed, appearing again and again, with the change in the tides."

[quote="Caldwell;d13725"]Grimy wetted land we breached to the solemn sun - three hours away from setting. Blinding light foiled by brushing leaves and twigs that molted and melted twine...


"The sun broke through the rain late in the evening, its light scattered/interrupted by a collection of organic debris."

Quoting Caldwell
Over to plains, blazing by sky blue, as the rain also tithers where weather held a rare frame.


"Elsewhere, in the plains, the sky is blue as the rain pays tribute to an area not within its purview/domain. In the plains the weather is stable and not subject to so much rain and turbulence. The plain is" plane". Uneventful.

Quoting Caldwell
Blackened fight in wondering wary, understanding soggy for it was in my way. Fortune is merry but vile of darkest grain, splatter, splintering bold.


A dark struggle it is in thinking or pondering cautiously, appreciating the wetlands as an obstacle (I think this is from the point of view of the sunlight).
The sunlight (fortune) feels good, but is of little worth to storms/rain/overcast conditions - its conquering, persistence and will to splinter - to break down the sunny weather into harsh fragmented conditions once again.

In summary, the story is think is about the battle between stormy times and joyous peaceful sunshine. The dynamic between prosperity and warmth and volatility/ instability.