Drive, He Said. - By Vera Mont

Caldwell December 11, 2022 at 03:22 1150 views 21 comments
"Nice body," he said, looking me up and down, like a piece of merchandise. "Curves in all the right places, sexy rear bumper. She'll do."
He scribbled his famous name on the contract, swiped his black platinum Euro card and climbed into the passenger seat. "Okay," he said, "you drive."
Dutifully, I asked, "Where to, Sir Hames?"
He didn't bother to reply, just punched an address into the GPS.
I had to remind him, "Please fasten your seatbelt."
"Why, you gonna crash?"
I refused to start the engine until he snapped the buckle shut. That didn't stop him talking. He made observations about every female pedestrian. His opinion was low and expressed in the crudest possible terms.
"Go faster," he said.
"I am driving at the speed limit, Sir Hames," I replied.
"Who cares? Go faster!"
Unable to comply, I did what I had longed to do since I met him. I pulled over and stopped, shut down the engine. For five glorious minutes, everyone on the street stopped and stared while he beat his fat fists on my hood, screaming, "Piece of shit! Goddam piece of shit!"

Comments (21)

Shawn December 11, 2022 at 03:24 #762783
Catches your attention right away. Nice read. :flower:
BC December 11, 2022 at 04:38 #762787
Reply to Shawn Some author -- totally forgot who -- said that novelists have to capture the interest and confidence of the reader in a very few pages. IF the first two or three pages interest us, and IF we are confident that the story will deliver, we'll read it.

I've found this principle works. Even if I open a book in the middle and read a few paragraphs, I can be sold or warned off. We've all slogged through soggy books that were not promising on the first page, and stayed true to their bad beginnings all the way to the end.
javi2541997 December 11, 2022 at 04:45 #762789
As @Shawn said: it catches your attention and you want to continue to read the story. Congratulations to the author, it is a good one. I guess with more words this would be an acceptable chapter for a long novel.
Amity December 12, 2022 at 17:54 #763180
Drive, He Said

A lovely story of sweet revenge by a thinking/talking/driving inanimate on her arrogant, entitled 'master'.
I hope her hood survived to tell another tale...

Brilliant run of contrasting dialogue.
Drive, He Said.
No, She Said.

So funny :cool:
I like it :up:
Benj96 December 15, 2022 at 18:48 #764175
Reply to Caldwell Love some personification of the inanimate I do.

A nice little gem on the distinction between objectification and subjectification. The machine here is the ethical character. Whilst in reality tools and machines are simply used, and have no opinion or agency regarding what they're used for.

Perhaps a ode to the rise of true artifical intelligence and the conflicts that may pose for people who want to be a bit irrational, a bit impulsive, and expect their posession to obey mindlessly.

He demands she go against her programming - that is the "good and safe behaviour" she operates by.

I like the story. Bravo/brava.
Tobias December 22, 2022 at 09:54 #765775
It is good actually. I misread it the first time around and missed it was actually the car that was the main character and not his driver. That is because I just read a short story about a man and his female driver. One thing I did not get though, why would a car like that be fitted with a limiter preventing it from transgressing the speed limit? Or do all self driving cars have such? That is interesting from a legal point of view...
Vera Mont December 22, 2022 at 14:50 #765801
Quoting Tobias
One thing I did not get though, why would a car like that be fitted with a limiter preventing it from transgressing the speed limit?


It's a high-end car, designed with all possible protections for the passenger. He probably paid extra for that feature and didn't even notice.
Hanover December 23, 2022 at 02:01 #765943
This was a revenge story of a stereotyped dutiful woman finally getting payback against the stereotyped chauvinistic male.

She was compliant, parental and just and he reckless, objectifying, arrogant, and childish.

A more reasonable man would have treated her this way:


god must be atheist December 23, 2022 at 08:54 #765996
There is a difference between "expected" and "predictable". The expected lies down comfortably on our souls. The predictable bores us.

In the world of a devotedly feminist woman, all women are saints and all men are chauvinistic pigs. The expected becomes predictable.
Tobias December 23, 2022 at 09:55 #766003
Quoting Vera Mont
It's a high-end car, designed with all possible protections for the passenger. He probably paid extra for that feature and didn't even notice.


:up: :lol:
Vera Mont December 23, 2022 at 13:54 #766051
Quoting god must be atheist
In the world of a devotedly feminist woman, all women are saints and all men are chauvinistic pigs. The expected becomes predictable.


It's unfortunate that that men predictably think of their modes of transport as female. The machine has no sex, gender or affiliation: that's only in the mind of the owner. And reader.
god must be atheist December 23, 2022 at 14:06 #766055
Quoting Vera Mont
It's unfortunate that that men predictably think of their modes of transport as female. The machine has no sex, gender or affiliation: that's only in the mind of the owner. And reader.


Men as a group do not do that. Some do, some don't.

NOT ALL MEN are the same. However, it is a socio-psychological fact that a demographic against which bias exists, will be branded to be a homogeneous group by the holder of the bias. This homogenizing comes up event after event after event.
Vera Mont December 23, 2022 at 14:15 #766056
Quoting god must be atheist
NOT ALL MEN are the same.


NOT ALL MEN are in the story. Just the one arrogant rich boy who feels entitled to break rules.

However, it is a socio-psychological fact that a demographic against which bias exists, will be branded to be a homogeneous group by the holder of the bias.

What - like feminists? They're not in the story, either.
god must be atheist December 23, 2022 at 14:20 #766057
Quoting Vera Mont
It's unfortunate that that men predictably think of their modes of transport as female.


Here you did not say NOT ALL MEN. But I take your adjustment in the wording.

Vera Mont December 23, 2022 at 14:50 #766060

I didn't say all men or some men or any men; I said it was predictable that men, collectively though not universally, do this. Some women also do it, but that's less predictable. Referring to vehicles as female, even to the point of giving them girls' names, is a common enough practice not to be remarked by most people, including many, though not all men.
0 thru 9 December 23, 2022 at 16:07 #766071
Haha... i get it now. Was expecting a sex worker and her “john”. Great stuff!! Satisfying ending. Pulling off something interesting and coherent in 200 words is like tap-dancing in a phone booth!
:blush: :up:

(you see kids... a long time ago public phones had these small booths around them. YouÂ’d pay to use them, and couldnÂ’t even watch movies on them. Crazy!)
Hanover December 25, 2022 at 00:28 #766375
I agree the man was simplified into a sex driven man child, and we even learned he was fat brat and not an attractive one.

It'd've been more interesting if the car showed an attraction to him, yet he had another car that he liked, and there was a car-car-person love triangle that ended in a suicide/homicide when the car drove off a cliff, this time without the seat belt warning. That was intentional by the evil car.

Wait, I'm not done.

Then, when the car was at the bottom of hill, burning out of control, a baby car emerges from the trunk because we now learn the car was preggers, so it was a triple death, the final one being a vehicafeticide. But it doesn't die right away, but it suffers for years, depleting the family of all its money, and then when it finally dies alone, no one gives a fuck.

And then the story ends with Santa orally pleasuring Jesus.

That's how I saw it going. But I always think things will be cliche like that.
Vera Mont December 25, 2022 at 02:58 #766398
Quoting Hanover
And then the story ends with Santa orally pleasuring Jesus.


Midnight mass, I think. And confession.
Merry whatever....
Benkei December 26, 2022 at 07:21 #766544
Reply to Hanover I just learned a cliff doesn't have to be next to the sea so you really have to be careful when you go cliff diving.
Hanover December 26, 2022 at 13:03 #766569
Reply to Benkei I found you your more specific word, the "cliffed coast." https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cliffed_coast

I just learned fjords must be by the sea, but there has to be an inlet with another fjord across from it. There also has to be a Viking ship nearby I think.

Vera Mont December 26, 2022 at 16:37 #766613
Well, I'm glad that's cleared up!